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Escaping Suns

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William's eyes are sensitive to sunlight, (as too are mine), that he

establishes position to that of Asha in offering her the limelight.

          

 

 

                           SONNET MMDCCLXXXVIII

 

A glimmer sent would touch the hint desired,

to sweet resolve the next almighty show

of sunlight that once more adjusted glow

such portals are the vastly sums inspired:

For having shielded light away from thee,

could I have slight deflected certain rays

this much from having found my darker days

the future bleak inherits moments free.

Yet how obscure I feel I cannot trace,

the shadow slowly moving east to west

a patient wait surrounding my obsessed

conveyance shall the sunset too replace. 

To mingle with the prepositioned thence,

does spiritual awareness commonsense?    

 

                    SONNET MMDCCLXXXIX

 

A slight but depth related sulk between,

The shift of an idea to movement soothes

the sun as ours, each show of it now proves

us closer, more contently t'wards that scene;

The dazzle of enpasse, does compass point

direct us that to build upon the dreams

of those we see alive than death extremes,

would dearly love to touch the true anoint.

How subtle doth the turn of limbs combine,

affectionately joined as two unite

a roaming sure assisted common light,

would ask to give a little more than thine.

To shed some light upon the shadow's next,

a predetermined ask for no objects.

 

 

                        SONNET MMDCCLXXXX (SPENCERIAN)

 

Once outline to the subtle scroll across,

has moved, it filters slight to one degree

an edge that once perhaps with equal toss

be searching for the faith in clarity. 

So gathered are the eyes each gaze to trail, 

the range depicting hues with often loss;

vastly sums elude to hidden detail,

seeking its refinement deep emboss.  

An urge of go betweens and earthly scale,

would magnify my love in untold counts

if certain moves require we move the veil

let untoward imagine them amounts!

The sun for all its worth what guarantee,

assures us having found such chemistry.

Author notes

They shall grow not old, as we that are left grow old:
Age shall not weary them, nor the years contemn.
At the going down of the sun and in the morning
We will remember them.

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  • JinSays gold member
    October 29

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    So gathered are the eyes each gaze to trail,
    the range depicting hues with often loss;
    vastly sums elude to hidden detail,
    seeking its refinement deep emboss.

    Sometimes you write so intelligently I cannot get my mind around it, and I've always thought I was reasonably intelligent. This poem is very mysterious to me. Even the author's note leaves me wondering. Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest and I wish you all the best.
    love,
    jin

  • towhit
    October 10

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    Lovely imagery.

    I really enjoyed this. Your poetry has a higher level of development than many on here, and I thought your control of imagery was lovely. I like that you chose to write this is a series of sonnets. I think it helps the reader to follow your thought more easily. Sometimes your phrasing is a tad bit convoluted, you might try working a little more on clarity in future works. Overall, quite lovely.


  • Phoenix Rising
    October 10

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    this is really good and i love the imagery
    good luck in the contest


  • smitaanand
    October 10

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    The words have a promoise of depth in every breaht and lovel expression and emotion that hurls and splashes the mind's canvas with vibrant colours.The pain is also there just a shadow but seen and optimism is the reining thought and sighs of satiation are breathed by soul that is in raptures.Glad you shared ...


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    October 10

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    Wow!!
    Brilliant take on the prompt
    The sonnets that you have woven together are stunning
    The imagery is breath-taking as well
    Bravo

    Wish you the best in the contest
    David


  • Evenstar gold member
    October 10

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    i think i like this very much. your words are delicate and a promise of forever. beautifully written and expressed. You did no wrong with this.


  • Stickboy gold member
    October 10

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    wonderful words you have written, love the pic too best of luck in the contest dear poet
    Sean


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    October 9

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    to taste the love from the message derived . as the splendor covet the message brought from heart to page well display ..stunning .. well penned Hugs Angel♥

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