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Sweet Freedom

I’m so close to the window of  freedom

      that I can drink it              from the stagnant air.


It’s honey                          like harmonic’s rhythmic notes,

and entrances the wind within my   

                                                                                hair.


Author notes

I wrote this at work. After working five days straight for 8 hours a day for the first time in your life you welcome the freedom and get a little stir-crazy waitng for your 2 days off to start.

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  • chael
    October 22

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    Cool

    It's fragmented, I like that. This is very, very wild. And I get it. At least at my level anyway, well done.....chael,,,,, It makes me think of cruisin' with the top down


    • iamthebeatles
      October 23
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      Thanks for the nice comment chael. I am glad you liked how I presented it and I like knowing what it made you think of. As a poet I find others interpretations of my work inspiring and reassuring. It makes me feel like I did a good job of getting my message across. Many thanks.

      peace
      Cassie


  • Denerica
    October 9

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    My 2 days come after 7am tomorrow morning, hope I keep these clever words to mind, maybe in my own way, ah the taste of it. Excellent. Blessings.