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conversations with an almost stranger, pt III: the language of silence







If I could stand feet apart from you

but close enough to watch
the blue of your eyes
blink into gray

would I be near enough to hear your heart?

You sigh- the barely audible
sound of broken

"only if you understand the language of silence."
















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  • tara wilson gold member
    October 12

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    "pt III: the language of silence" i would cut that from your title, because it's your power line in the poem...i also really love this line:

    "would I be near enough to hear your heart?"

    and "the sound of broken"

    anyways, just a suggestion with the title... i love your poetry..

  • Rowan gold member
    October 10
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    nothing to critique...
    this is good. Period.


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 9

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    Sigh-worthy, indeed. And mine are usually of the contented variety.