losing my wife I wanted everyone to suffer
why is anyone smiling and laughing?
the sun comes out when it should be in mourning
it makes me angry to see the brightness
the stars shine at night and the moon reflects
is it to mock me and my sadness and grief?
I feel the heat from the sun and I still shiver
I scream for someone to turn off the heat
my heart is cold, my mind is dark forever more
why can't the sun just cooperate with me?
it sneers at my sorrow and plays a power game
I hide in my bedroom with shades drawn
one morning my son takes me by the hand
he toddles outside and we sit on the ground
I'm forced to watch the sun come up today
I smile finally, guess it will come up anyway
Author notes
here comes the sun
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A contest entry
- here comes the sun, day No.12 by JinSays.
706 points, ended October 29, 12 entries
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Awww...that is such a great ending to such a sad poem. You did a marvelous job with it. This is an awesome write. Be strong hun! Keep up the good writing!
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I have already written a long a poignant comment here, but for some reason, it didnt take. What I basically said was there was no way I could imagine dealing with the death of a loved one, and to feel the ache you have for your wife is just so touching. thank you for this entry, Im sure it couldnt have been easy opening up this pain. I wish you peace. love always,
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good luck in this steve, its so sad,,,,,,,,,,,but real...............I can relate with death and its devastating effects, it has on the ones left behind........great writing...
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The first stanza in by far my favorite as it is full of the emotional state of a grieving husband. Sorry for your loss, but I'm glad you found comfort in writing.
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If only we all could be so open and forgiving as young children...you are blessed to have a sun(son) to take your hand and lift youup. A wonderful poem of honest grief and healing love. Your darling wife is so present in your words too...she uses his hand to hold onto yours...Peace, Rhonda
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Oh honey I know its hard
But your son will help you find the strength to carry on .Let not your pain take away the joy there before you .Know she is not far away for those in heaven can se and hear all they come to us in many forms and through the child for they hear their whispers and see far more than us adults can will give you those whispers to let you know if you keep yourself open you shall see her as well in many forms through life .Bless your heart
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Keep the faith Steve for both yourself and your son, he needs a dad that can show him how to smile and laugh and be happy. It is an eternal legacy that she left you it is now upto you to make that young boy into a man someday.
I am sorry to see the pain this loss has you facing, each day is a new day Steve I guess there is not much more you can do but live and keep her memomry somehow.
Look forward to reading more of your work.
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This kind of reminds me of a song that goes "the sun will set for you" I think it's from Lincon Park.
Bitter sweet nastalgia- mixed with realizations dawn, sucks to be in that place sometimes dosen't it? But a relief also, kind of like a cool waterfall washing over you, cleansing your soul with realization and promise.
Very nice work. Good luck in the contest
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You had me at the first stanza. That first stanza - could stand alone, it is so full of emotion. Well done.
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Well written, poet.
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the pain of losing a love on is so hard to fathom.. and and one day soon the sun will come up again an the morning will shine in you well penned in heart Hugs Angel♥
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you are a-mazing!
Wow im kinda speechless.
This poem's power steals my breath and the bitterness and anger seeps through.
I know it may not mean much and you dont know me. But im proud of you for writing about it.
Stay strong ok?
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