Is my glass half full of hope or despair
does the balance lean toward “I don’t care”
do the implements that make up my soul
have me sing only half notes, never whole.
Do I dither on the brink of free will
never certain which way to go, until
my commitment is a challenge to face
so in silence I suffer, just in case,
Will I ever see a dawn and rejoice
responding to the sunshine’s rousing voice,
or will the covers stay about my head
smothering all my wishes to be dead?
Is my song a lament or gushing soul?
Do I sing only half notes, never whole
Author notes
Prompt: And I sing only half notes, never whole
A contest entry
- Prompt 119 by crivanea.
700 points, ended October 25, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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a lovely sonnet..and i think the form did quite nicely with the prompt too..to me..i often feel that the last 2 lines in a sonnet is too..half a poem..half a stanza...lovely
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haunting in a way the words linger in you mind for a while, but in the end the whole of this poem and not just half, is golden, keep it flowing
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interesting
An interesting view on life's dilemmas. Very few of us are ever sure that we are doing the right thing. Well put
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I like this. You did very well with the prompt given. The last line kind of hits the reader in the gut (in a good way) because of where and how you put it.
The meter and rhyme are smooth and unforced.
You've done very well here, poet!
Best of luck in the contest
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Wow. i truly do love this. your rhyming is well and you are able to express feelings that others as well as myself wish we could find the words to do. this is amazing.
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