I can hear the garbage men outside,
picking up the trash,
and the early morning is still dark
as the rain drizzles down slowly...
and over and over again i keep wondering,
why did you do it? why did you leave
you selfish ba stard...
why did you throw your life away, so easily...
my words die in my throat as i choke on my tears,
anger makes tears shed all the more quickly,
and then i stare numbly in my shock:
you see,I never thought you would do it...
I want to scream and rage-
but i can't...
you left everything and everyone behind,
and i hope you knew that i cared,
that i never stopped-
In my mind I'm still here for you,
still holding you,rocking you to sleep
i soothe all of your burdens and sufferings
away,as i cry,lament for all you have been through,
and i will never let you go...you're perfect,
nothing will change it...
and my mind keeps whispering-
never let you go...i miss you so much,
i'll never let you go...
Author notes
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Comments
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sad...beautifully, amazingly written!! could really feel the emotion...
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This is beautifully penned and I found it captivating. You let me, your reader into a very personal part of your life and it explodes with emotion. bravo!
Love,
Amera
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Awesome! From the cerulian blue morn you've though of a passed on loved person! Sorry you have to deal with such sadness and anguish at the 'memberance in this poem but still wonderful work and excellently wrote.
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this is a really emotional poem. it captures the feeling strongly, and it makes one feels the emotions that is painted in each verse. for me i feel like i can relate and that makes it powerful, in emotions and meaning!! very well done!!! i stand clapping!!!!
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Sad....
..... I liked it but it brought back bad memories of when I lost my first daughter. I felt the same way she was perfect... too perfect for this world. I am sorry for your loss and hope for quick healing
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You did a great job here, it's sad and amazing at the same time!
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this to me sounded like a friend's sorrow over a suicide
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This was so sad, i felt it as i read it, the pain must be unbearable...and i gathered it from your writing. Well done and i'm sorry for your loss
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This was written with a heartfelt and sincere style. I like how you pore over the emotions you feel towards this person, and the loss and rejection you feel. The title and first lines really work to draw the reader into the poem. Nicely done, and good luck in the contest.
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aww this poem is so sad . i felt every word you wrote thats how beaitifuly written it is . good luck in the contest .
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aww god thats so sad
its a very heartfelt piece and i enjoyed reading it....i get all the feelings you were trying to get across its an amzing poem in that sense.
thank you for the entry and the best of luck to you x -
Maybe, just maybe you have stopped me doing something someone would hate me for, for always, thank you, it was quite a mind turner.
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You really do have a great ability to set a scene... I like the emotion in this piece as well, you do a good job of conveying the hurt that you feel, the conflict of emotions, the inner turmoil... good work, keep it up...
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:/ omg.. its so sad.... :[
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