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A Flower and Her Gardener

I saw you bloom today
Once a tiny bud
You blossomed and the sight is too good to be true
I know you're not a perfect flower
If such a thing exists, in my eyes it's you
But all flowers must grow and your innocence will not last forever
Like a good gardener I'll watch over you
With paranoid eyes toward all your suitors
You will never have a fear of being trammpled
Sadly I know a man will pick you for himself one day
To me you will always remain that bud, I had the privledge to watch
Grow and blow away

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    October 10

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    What a beautiful poem I could take this metaphorically with a parent and a child who watches their daughter/son grow and move on to be married but I can also take it for what it is; either way it is lovely

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  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    October 10

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    I like the way your poem can be taken literally or figuratively

    In line 3 it seems like your first instance of "to" should be "too

    It seems that the gardner is like the parent of a child who is growing up or even like the creator watching over his children. Nicely written

    Violet
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    • M.m.t.
      October 11

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      Thanks, seems that got lost in translation from my notebook to the big screen.