Waking up,
every day the same
as the last
Ssdd
some would call it
Uncle freeloader
enjoys his porn
and 15$ a month
Video games.
A slave to the computer revolution
Father pothead
an image of god
that’s what he sees in the mirror
Hypocrite
has it all figured out
Slave to both his passions
Ah there’s mom
slave to society
every night at 8
being fed what
ever's on the menu
Same shit,
Different day
some would say
Author notes
Basic family
A contest entry
- Because I really want to give you your twentieth GOLD! by ea.
700 points, ended October 10, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Your thoughts, i wanna hear em
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I could have worked out here that you are a yank even if I hadn't looked at your profile, for you write the $ sign in front of the number. Great imagery and the flow ran smoothly throughout. Some would say this is a great write as does this reader here, and you could have written a one thousand page book on this subject and still not come close to explaining the facts of life as they are in our sad society. So what you've done here is awesome for the fact you have painted a good picture in ones mind of how it is out there in the real world. Indeed awesome man and congratulations on your silver trophy win.
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ah spideracer, nice to hear from you again like always. Love to get some insightfull comments on my pieces. I'll head over t yours soon to get some inspiration.
Much love
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awesome
yeah i can relate to this 100%
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agreed.
enough said, with not enough words.
cant really be all written out on this topic..
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great poem here
lots of line i'm gonna steal
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This is reality in many homes at this point. Can't wait to read the fallout about the technical revolution on the family unit in another few years but maybe I'll be gone before it gets really good and will be spared. What are the kiddies being fed or are they on their own? Your poem is right on the money as far as horny bastards go, but the competition in this small contest is seemingly stiff.
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scary!!
i flashed to my childhood...except my dads video games were stereo equip. And dope. Mom so lost in dope society- she couldnt see straight. Sorry to get so deep and personnal on ya! - just totally related i guess. Write on soul brother!
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Nah, thank you i always appreciate what people have to say. If it invokes thought, i love to hear them ya know
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Nice work... I know what it's like to be stuck in a rut....
Tell me... is SSDD a reference to Stephen King's Dreamcatcher or did you get it from somewhere else... King has a couple stories where the main character feels like his life is an adventure in monotony... that's why I ask.
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