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Fates Calamity


Always giving way to eternity
Who am I, but what you make?
Destined to be the "pretty thing"
That you want on your arm

Where has that passion gone?
Calmly it has become hypocrisy

As you flame about double standards

Unbelievably I believe you blindly

 

I wanted to be the one you want

And to be the one that you needed

I want to be the stars in your sky

I wanted to shine for you every day

 

But I wondered am I truly good?

After all of the emotional turmoil

Are you really any good for me?

Am I good enough for anyone?

 

Flames take rise and energy sparks

Throwing lightening into the fire

Creating a simple rift and we fall

Sucked into routine and boredom

 

Were we always friends like this?

Lucky doesn't seem to be right

And yet fate doesnt cover subtext

So where do we go from here?

 

With what we currently know?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 



 

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  • Topnotchsy
    October 12

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    "But I wondered am I truly good?
    After all of the emotional turmoil
    Are you really any good for me?
    Am I good enough for anyone?"

    This stanza captured the confusion and mixed emotions really well. Nice write.


  • aceray
    October 10

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    No emotion in it? I disagree with Evenstar. I feel your confusion, thinking that you were doing the right thing but it not really working out! Then feeling maybe that you are inadquate in loving them! All of this comes waaaaaay too close to the bone for me.

    Nicely written and understood by me.

    Rey


  • Evenstar gold member
    October 9

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    Its good. a relateable subject on the whole,but i don't really feel the emotion in it. Although the whole thing is well protrayed and expressed. i felt you had a unique choice of words here and that was interesting. It could be made better,but i did like it.


    • xPink-Lotusx
      October 9
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      Thank you for this constructive comment. I meant for this piece to be devoid of emotion. It is kind of the f-u to love and friendship lines. When they are crossed how things can get all screwy. Thanks for the perceptive comment tho. I appreciate your reading this piece. I am glad that it was a likeable piece.