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imitation




maybe your

s m i l e s
(never reflected in my eyes)

but when you gave me

fake
  l
o
were those
even meaningful to you? 
  r
s

you+I
no longer = us

and you hated
dark chocolate
and I detested white

(so maybe our love is
bittersweet?)

love you?
?em evol

reflection never
gave us the real thing

just counterfeits




Author notes

prompt: counterfeit

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  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    October 19

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    Interesting! I liked the flowers acrostic. You crafted this nicely, with many different techniques and I enjoyed reading it.

    Thanks for entering, and good job on the prompt

    - Polymerized


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 14
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    Dame you do dirty pretty perfectly.

  • Judith Chandler
    October 10

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    This is certainly different, kind of playful, esp. the backwards writing to reinforce the idea of reflection.


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    October 8

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    I was sent here by Diminished Capacity, and judging by this stanza...

    fake
    l
    o
    were those
    even meaningful to you?
    r
    s

    I can see why!
    That was incredible! So clever!

    How do you write backwards?
    Love me back was awesome.

    Dirty pretty is definietly one of my favourite styles.
    You are incredible