piano plays
softly in the background,
at dawn,
and i listen with my head in my hands,
reflections resound in each gentle sad note,
my solitude left no words
and I don't want anything except peace
inside my quiet world,
there is no one else outside
who would care to provide such silence,
understanding...
We are all on our own,
and I've accepted that...
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i really like this - the tone established, the expression sharing enough to convey the feel, but not overdone, and the sense of resolved reached.
well done.
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for whatever possible reason you can come up with, I liked this. I think we can all do ourselves a favor and take a look back at the time when we realized we were on our own, for better or worse. I short poem, I think I would have liked to have seen more of the metamorphosis myself. thanks for taking the time to enter this contest, and I wish you all the best. love,
jin -
truly one of the best ive read here so far,sound like we can relate, anyway i liked it a lot and will return to read more soon,
peace
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So True...
Acceptance and feeling the loss all together.... this has been really well expressed... and beautifully worded.
Thank you for sharing this...
All the best
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wow....i really enjoyed it..
very well written..n very true..
nice thoughtful write..great flow..
liked d lines "reflections resound in each gentle sad note,
my solitude left no words"..
great work!!
keep it up..
~Parth.
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The picture of acceptance alone, with ones head in ones hands, is visceral. Each word contributes to the final impact. Very well done. Bluebird
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this poem is full of emotions.
a very realistic and comprehensible composition.
the flow and arrangement of thougths/ideas are brilliant.
i think the author has a vast experience in terms of writing poems..
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This is very good. It's completely true; all we have in the end is ourselves, up until our very last breath. Thank you for writing something as to the point yet solemn as this. Good luck on the contest!
Vhoori
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Never.....
..... are you truly alone, I am always in the darkness watching
seriously though this was a good write and I am glad I stopped in to read it!
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Wow, I've a memory with that same sentiment at the end of this poem. The epiphany changed me forever. Well-penned.
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I love the way you open the poem, and the closing line is definitely true. While there are many things we share with others, the deepest elements of our lives are lived by us and us alone, each one of us choosing the path down which they will walk. Nice write here.
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Nice One
I really like the way that the first three lines are seperate, as most people would put then on one line. I think it creates a good rhythm for the poem. I don't know about your personal preference but i tend to start each line with a capital letter. Just makes it look neater. I'm not keen on the background as i think it's slightly too busy and can distract from the beautiful writting. Overall i like it though, very well written. Well Done!
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Solitude and loneliness
I like your poem. The distinction between solitude and loneliness can be quite a fine one and that is illustrated nicely by your work... the feeling of sadness I get from your first five lies is transformed rather by the end to peace - acceptance. Well written! -
I really liked the imagery, it sort of reminds me of the inner quiet that I feel when I go hiking by myself.... sort of... can't really replace being alone in the woods with only a compass though...
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Awesome
We are all on our own,
and I've accepted that...
I love this. The imagery and the flow are impeccable. I was sucked into this piece and wanted to read it more. I like the background. I also like the placement and how it all came together. Very nice all in all. I give it 3 thumbs!
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