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Death of a Rose

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Dried
red rose,
the cutting
and sad wilted
reminder of your
cruel broken promise to
respect our love and wait here.
Now death fills up my tattered heart,
as the choking smell of the rose seethes
like a corpse rotting in an unmarked grave.
Misplaced, alone and confused in anger,
I lay upon the freshly tilled dirt,
longing to smell you once again.
Soil and petals slip between
my dry brittle fingers
and mascara runs.
Dead long ago,
my one rose
laid to
rest.

Author notes

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An etheree is a poem which consists of 10 lines. This is a double etheree, or 20 lines. Syllable count is 1-2-3-4-5-6-7-8-9-10-10-9-8-7-6-5-4-3-2-1

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  • X.brokenlover.X
    November 4

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    The imagery and emotion here is so powerful it's astounding!
    "Now death fills up my tattered heart,
    as the choking smell of the rose seethes"
    I loved that part the best and i can almost feel the pain of my heart being ripped out and this rose which should symbolize love just dying right in front of you. Fantastic write and good luck in the contest thanks for entering!


  • robena
    October 26

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    wow i like this one such imagery an emotion packed. i like the way u shaped it too, couldnt have been easy. even still a great write here
    good luck in ur contest


  • MJ Forgives
    October 23

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    I love how your poem is shape like a diamond. That caught my atttention. I thought that was really cool. I enjoyed reading your poem. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
    -Jess


  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    October 21

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    I LOVE the Etheree, and I've only seen one other the site done this way. How beautiful; not just the design the "two" etherees made, but the poem, itself! Makes me want to attempt another to achieve the diamond shape. Really beautiful work!


  • love-life-peace
    October 8
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    I love the form of your poem. I enjoyed reading it too!

    I never thought about the death of a rose...


  • happy-lil-artemis
    October 8
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    WOW

    this is great

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