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Autumn

Soon I will sleep forever -
this skin will peel from weathering
bones.
These veins which once were
blue with life will forget the
bitter taste of oxygen.

All is lost

The air is cold, whispering death
through weakening trees, whose
leaves cling desperately through
the numbing breeze.

The bright array of colours
paint the path for lifes departure,
natures sodden victims will be my bed
this coming winter.

The stars burn with fires of
the worlds dreams and wishes but
each one will blink out,
as this world diminishes.


All is lost

Soon I will sleep forever but
I won't be dreaming...

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  • A floatingleaf silver member
    October 22
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    We all think of that forever sleep, well written...


  • AutumnEffect
    October 13

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    Amazing

    Wow. . first off, this is simply amazing. Incredible and STRAIGHT from your heart. There's so much passion in it, and I can tell that you put yourself into the poem.


  • lyricist
    October 10
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    i see i havent read anything new from you in awhile. at least you still have the skills and flo. excellent write.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 9

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    WOW

    sweetheart, you show, and prove you are a POET/WRITER with this pen
    eloquent, deep and thought provoking this is a powerful write, felt very dark and sad, yet so outstanding at the same time..I SEE NO RUST as a result from your absence..


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 8

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    Vivid alive thoughts covered my mind
    and the beauty of sadness came within
    Such a wonderful poem
    Best wishes to you
    Julie

  • catstar
    October 8

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    I love poems about dying seasons and the world changing. This was amazing. To creatures in the wild it must seem like the end of the world. And right now I'm cold enough to feel like one of them.

    Fantastic poem. Its perfect in my mind. Thanks for sharing.

  • Muffliato
    October 8

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    This is morbidly gorgeous! The imagery is perfectly vivid, and the metaphors incredibly help the dream-like quality to the words. The picture of this beautiful yet deathly scene is wonderfully haunting, especially in the last two lines.


  • moderndayvampire
    October 8

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    cool

    brutal-made me feel cold and isolated..good work! jeeze i need a blancket!lol

  • Tecohe
    October 8
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    Good autumn dreariness

    Well written descriptions of cold, coors and death.
    Tecohe


  • PolarbearApocalypse
    October 8

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    This is so sad! But its beautiful.

    "all is lost

    Soon I will sleep forever but I won't be dreaming"

    I love that part!

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