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Alabaster Skies

 

Alabaster skies drenched wonderously
raining below her eyes, appearing not to

recognize miseries hand when reaching
forth to accept the flowers she delighted in;

only touching dried petals falling to the ground

Looking upward...heart shaped cloud

held cherub right, also angel rose left

Author notes

Prompt:
Snowflakes kiss her
tongue cold, but warmly;
as knitting to summer.

And in the culling of
seasons to swallow,
she settles for the winter-

one foot in the grave.


By~perfectsunset~

A contest entry

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  • sgking123 gold member
    November 17

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    heart shaped

    this poem was so much shaped thus...did you raelize that..I did when i came to its end...welld one..godo flow and terrific sewing of words


  • Sonya-Erasmus silver member
    November 6
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    This was so beautiful.
    Sweet and sad at the same time.
    Such a heartfelt piece.
    Congrats on the trophy.
    Love
    Sonya


  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 14

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    Wow, this was divinely beautiful
    So much deep thought &
    graceful images throughout.

    Wonderful take on the prompt!

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • Desire gold member
    October 10

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    Oh My~

    Now this is a Beauty~
    Love the reference to:
    miseries hand~
    That is Powerful
    Noticed...Lookiing upward= Looking
    Adore the words: Heart shaped cloud
    Wow~
    Me thinks I know what You are referring to
    in the IM
    What a small world~
    Excellent take on the prompt~
    which was a challenge...

    but You brought Imagery and Energy
    Bravo!!
    Keep that quill dancing

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • HereComesTheSun
    October 8

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    you have such great words chosen in this piece.
    the only issue i had was the way you broke this up into stanza's made the flow a bit hard to read. but other then that it was a great write.


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 8

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    I love the way you took this prompt and created a wonderful version of out of the box thoughts
    I am sure Magz will also love this poem
    A beautiful poem
    Best wishes Julie


  • AlexandraHamilton
    October 8
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    Oh, what a poem! I read it twice and loved it more the second time. Well said

    Good luck in the contest!

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