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Shapless Clouds

If I was a cloud,
Shapeless

If I was a cloud
I would shrink and shrink
Over my entire size
And just rain on you
Be with you all the time.

I won’t hide the moon,

I would take shapes of your breath
Move in you, touch your lips
Wet you…

But what if you were too a shapeless cloud,

Then, we would have just merged.
And never rained.

Just if we were Shapeless
Clouds.

Author notes

Shapeless refers to something without a definite shape. Here shape means characteristics of an individual, specially their nature, their ego and so on.

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  • aboomer silver member
    October 29

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    I like the depth in this - how it can relate to people. I do see a lot of couples where one personality definitely overshadows the other, then I also see couples who just blend and seem to have one joint personality....or no personality at all.....
    anyways.....great depth, plenty to ponder.
    No real constructive critique on this - personally, I like it just as it is.

    thank you for your entry
    best wishes in the contest