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We are all made of clay.

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It rained little boy and we opened our mouths to taste his vulgar water.

If humanity is thirsty, then why don’t we build ourselves a wishing well.


I wish Tommy boy wouldn’t pick grains from rice fields.

I wish I could tree hug an electric orgy of freedom and happiness.

I wish oil was only used to light candles in the moonlight .


Yet this quench still evaporates beauty from my tongue and I can’t help but hate the world some more as little boy makes a zig zag attempt to fix the world with a nuclear wishing well.

 

 

 

 

 

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Author notes

http://www.treehugger.com/nuclear-war-co2-emit.jpg


Little boy is the nickname they gave the bomb that hit hiroshima.

so ' it rained little boy...." makes sense that way

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  • Alexis-Rueal
    9 hours ago
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    I really enjoyed this piece. I love the first line of this poem... heck, I love the entire poem. Rich language, wonderful imagery. You moved me and I appreciate it. Bravo.


  • sgking123 gold member
    1 day ago
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    wow

    Mango lady is indeed so deep in this write..she is discussing the very topics that are laguing mankind as of now...I never thought this poem would go about these as it did.


  • condor gold member
    November 28
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    very well written poem which had so much to say and was full of the empotion one would expect from such a piece. The little boy might have been an event that seemed horrid and terrible to many but one has to look at the side that brought it about. I have no qualms where this was concerned and can understand fully the reason behind the little boy being let loose. For all that it did and the horrors it unleashed i believe it was nothing compared to what would have happened had not this come about. I like the way you wrote this and how you handled the situation and was impressed by the wording used. You are a very deep and emotional writer who brings out in people a lot to think about. My favourite part of this would have to be......

    If humanity is thirsty, then why don’t we build ourselves a wishing well.

    Very well done indeed and I congratulate you on your trophies won by it.

  • Krblue
    November 17
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    Amaxing, Speechlessly so...


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    November 15

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    EXCELLENTLY magnific...


    I like what I read here... "We are all made of clay" is a politic-philosophic picture of the "Intelligence" of the "LEADERS" of our planet. This should be posted on the doors of The United Nations Security Council, for that is the office of The Industrial Wars and Social Unrest's Engineers.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    November 15
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    welcome back...

  • uniquelyme
    November 15
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    This was really good it's sad that the world is this way


  • ArchCarXxx
    November 15
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    so nice. heartbreaking. I love this. These are the poems that always get my attention. Great Job!


  • Amazon Huntress
    November 15

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    "We are all made of clay" ? Can I ask where the title came from?
    Interesting play on a very complex subject.


  • Divinorum Zin
    November 15
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    I wish I could tree hug an electric orgy of happiness to!

    ~enchanting thought!


  • Debbydoes
    November 15

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    thanks for the note...I would have never known and as reader Lagrimas says below, and I echo those thoughts, I'm not likely to forget it any time soon. This is an amazing write, so heartbreaking yet so hopeful.

    I love this line:

    "I wish oil was only used to light candles in the moonlight "


    that line speaks volumes!


  • aaa2345423
    November 14

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    Great

    love the wording you use and the title could stand alone and still be a poem that really speaks. All around great.


  • CaliOkie silver member
    November 9

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    Striving to better oft' we mar what's well. We would do well to learn from history.

    Garrison


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    November 4

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    Come One, Come All Contest Judging

    1. Poetic Device - 15/20
    2. Theme and Emotional Connection - 9/10
    3. Creativity - 18/20
    4. Vocabulary - 12/15
    5. Title Relation - 5/10
    6. Bonus Points for "It" Factor - 20/25

    TOTAL: 79/100


  • Barry Hodges
    November 3
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    Very confusing to me.


  • Lagrimas
    November 3

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    Moving in so many ways

    I have to agree with most of the people who have responded to this piece. It is so moving in such a powerful way. I hadn't known about the nickname, and thanks to this poem I will likely never forget.

    I am so impressed by how cleanly this all fits together. Even if I didn't have the point of reference I would still be greatly moved by this piece.


  • Fallen Angel 2
    November 2
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    Crazy.... This piece was really good. Congrats.


  • manatee
    November 2

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    Fat Man, Thin Man, Little Boy. Boom. Good poem. -The Manatee


  • My Solitude
    November 1

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    Incredible!

    I am in total awe right now! 'an electric orgy of freedom and happiness.' Wow! how did you come up with lines like that??? U're indeed truly gifted. Thanks for sharing. I loved this poem to bits. Congrats on the trophy, too.


  • IronIcecream
    November 1

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    made of clay but 80 percent water
    and in vino veritas
    and in all this equation
    enola gay and little boy bring consensual peace

    ah the irony of parking maneuvers
    it's an anal world
    full of planes and weird t.v. psychosis


  • wbiro gold member
    November 1

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    a quickie... so you chose the nuclear mushroom cloud, and reacted with acid feelings (which run through the piece) which the contest host subliminally suggested he wanted, listing this prompt right after a Swastika... so... the question is, is this your true feeling, or is this an induced and socially expected feeling... (or on a lighter note- to give the contest host what he wanted! ) Whenever I encounter this kind of suggestiveness, I find that I give them the opposite- for there is nothing worse than being told how to feel about something- shades of tyranny... (just a thought for you on your future writes)... here I would have offered the brighter side of nuclear bombs... just out of principle...!


    • Lagrimas
      November 3
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      I don't understand

      Sorry I just read the piece and was reading the comments and I just had to ask in response to your post. How do you express the brighter side of that? I'm not being smart I just find that I don't think I could generate a poem based on that event that wasn't in some way less that bright.


      • wbiro gold member
        November 3
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        let's see if I can understand myself after a day...

        ah, on the good points of the atomic bomb... well, you can start with a quick end to WWII and the halt of the Soviet march across the globe, and take it from there...! Sad that teachings are so biased these days... you are a victim...

      • Mango Memories gold member
        November 3
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        lmao

        im confused with both your comments now.


  • Blueisacolour
    November 1

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    Wow.
    Your thought process is just... unbelievable.
    Creative, deep and brilliant.
    The opening line especially is just supergenius.

    You're amazing.


  • whyspr gold member
    November 1

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    Mango, thank you for explaining what "little boy " was, I didn't know that. I can see where your going with this write and it's a very strong message. This truely came from deep inside. You did really good on this and Im glad you put it in featured poetry. "I wish oil was only used to light candles in the moonlight"...

    in a perfect world.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    November 1

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    Ah..the last line took me into the imaginative land with a sense of the curiosity as well..a great poetry well done...thanks fo sharing it..


  • oldschoolhero
    November 1
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    not feeling this?


  • PrincessOfFire
    October 31

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    Wow, I'm at a standstillforwords. That seldom happens. Your write tends to confuse one. You say here: [It [a] rained little boy ]and we opened our mouths to taste his vulgar water.[shouldn't an [a] had been in there since you lend the little boy as reason water is vulgar, so where is the little boy coming from? o be truthful, I'm not sure at all what you are trying to convey here. THere are parts that make sense but are lost by the ones who doesn't. I even looked at the pic you provide. Either I'm having a blonde moment or maybe you did...lol Seriously I'm baffled. Rose


    • Mango Memories gold member
      October 31
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      I can understand your confusion.

      They nicknamed the nuke that hit hiroshima 'little boy'.

      it rained little boy.


  • Beautiful-Loser82
    October 31

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    Astounding

    this piece was beautiful and intricately woven. The words speak to me. Very nicely done!


  • spideracer
    October 31

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    That last stanza, really really awesome. Rest of poem is too and congratulations on your bronze trophy win here, a superb write indeed.

  • Simon Saint-Claire
    October 31

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    It seems congratulations are in order, but I feel I've come a bit late on the train...

    Very good job, nevertheless.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 31

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    Oh my goodness

    What an exceptional write you have penned here honey .Its depth in its wording is quite a muse indeed


  • ProudMomma
    October 31

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    this is really interesting... hard to understand .. but great write


  • wwfhrocks14
    October 31

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    veryy interesting, it's eclectic and original yet it allfits nicely together. i enjoyed reading this. congrats on hte bronze. =)


  • condor gold member
    October 31
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    I have no idea where this piece came from or what got your juices going but I can tell you that this has one hell of a strong and amazing message which was hammered at your readers. Just brilliant in the delivery and easy to see why you got the bronze for it. Man has a lot to answer for but something tells me that we will not be happy until we wipe ourselves out, much is the shame. I cannot say anymore that utter brilliance and a masterpiece in itself.


  • Naridill
    October 28
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    superb! Say it again; ...


    SUPERB!

  • ajithan
    October 26
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    inspires creativity, good


  • forvermorejpj
    October 24
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    kool.... it's a different kind of "cool"

  • peacebrat
    October 17
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    perfect work


  • Max Alexandersson
    October 17

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    Where the hell did this come from... Best write from you. Without a doubt.
    And if anybody disagrees... I don't wanna hear it!;-)...


  • whitecoffee
    October 16
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    perfect. Congrats on the bronze


  • Tzipora
    October 15
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    nicely done


  • bigperm
    October 15

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    I can see why this won a placing.

    The brevity is quite deep in thought, but concise in thought. Well done.


  • Yemassee gold member
    October 12

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    Life changed on April 6, 1945 when Little Boy fell upon Hiroshima. The repercussions are still felt today, and for a long time still, hopefully mankind can adjust to changes.

    If I'd written this there would be a lot of satire in these words, but I hesitate to say you are pointing a finger a politics as usual. Therefore I will see this as more of a personal exposé of sorts...to whom or what I don't know how to pick the lock on this possible story equivalent of the Roman à clef.


  • CaliOkie silver member
    October 9
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    Well deserved bronze. This has a nice little message without being strident. Very well done.

    Garrison

  • Tzipora
    October 8

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    nicely done. congrats on bronze.


  • HereComesTheSun
    October 8

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    again a well deserved medal i mean wow
    you are so talented.


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    October 8

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    wowee I love your imaginative take on this prompt hun, welldone on the bronze! Well worth it xx *rose DD


  • crivanea silver member
    October 8

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    congrats on the bronze


  • Griswold silver member
    October 8

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    Very nicely done and some grand imagery shown although raining little boy leads me to think of golden showers... Ewwwwwww Great job grabbing the Bronze... scott


  • SteveandSon gold member
    October 8

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    Lots of imagery here in this great poem. You did an awesome job. Good luck in any contest you are in. Keep on penning. I will read more of your poems when I get the points to give them what they deserve.
    Steve


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 7

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    Brilliantly poignant take on the prompt
    Sadly, I think we do live in a world of self distruction
    and Mankind will be its own demise...
    Einstein quoted, "As long as man exist there will be war"
    Will a "nuclear wishing well" be our end????
    I like your reference towards "humanity" and "rained little boy"
    Very clever
    Bravo
    Congratulations on the Bronze
    Very well deserved

    David


  • Nom de Plume
    October 7

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    it rained little boy, love that phrase your imagery in this is quite poignant, and unfortunately it is the world we live.... good luck


  • emma...
    October 7
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    woahhhhh. this is so amazing. i'm speechless


  • Heroesrox
    October 7

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    Gahhhhhhhhh!

    This is fantastic. Exactly what I want to read. Wonderful. I love the imagery from 'raining little boy' even though it's a bit gross if you take it the way I did. (He exploded.....)

    Thanks for entering. Good luck to you.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 7

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    I wish a lot of things like that too!! Like the thought in here!!

    Umm.. I think you must need some pineapple lumps with that pic up there! lol *hands pineapple lumps*


  • February Moon gold member
    October 7

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    Loved this in so many different ways.


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    October 7
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    you have large breasts. I was distracted from the poem.

    I do like the idea of humanity being thirsty though--nice line.


  • Kathraina gold member
    October 7

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    Oh i looooooooose.
    brilliant work

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