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Give me love

I want to...

feel your heart beat next to mine
feel giddy but not from wine
feel like I am walking on air
feel the love you have to share

I know...

I am enamored with the thought of you
my love cannot pass through
the distance our lives endure
I'm settling for less and i want more

I need ...

to see you, inhale your scent
feel your skin, share good times spent
to show you  youre the one I dream of
you to  give me give me love

Author notes

when reading this the short lines eg I want should be said before every line

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  • Rheea gold member
    October 17

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    Love how you wrote this and I hear the longing .    thank you


  • Grey.Area.
    October 11

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    I need ...

    to see you, inhale your scent
    feel your skin, share good times spent
    to show you youre the one I dream of
    you to give me give me love

    I like this section the best, I can feel the desperation, it is really relatable to!!!

    I like this poem alot and like the meaning and feeling behind it.

    I like the way you write each stanzas beginning

    ie. I need......

    If i had written the poem I would have probably written I need I need I need at the beginning of each line, but i think it sounds good both ways, but anyhow, I never thought of doing it like that before but ANYWAY good job, well written.