The world is a complex place,
An enigma of contrasting themes.
Where atoms split & the flowers grow,
Where marble shines & the embers glow.
The world is a maze of questions,
A tapestry of hidden meanings.
The world is a complex place,
Buried in lore & change.
Where motors run & the oceans rise,
Where bells ring & the sunlight dies.
The world is a mysterious place,
A blast furnace of existence.
The world is a complex place,
Encoded with magic and mayhem.
Where tanks roll & eagles soar,
Where bridges stretch & lions roar
The world is a esoteric puzzle,
A shadowy pit of possibilities.
The World is a complex place.
A mural of sheer diversity.
Where gavels slam & volcanos explode,
Where dice fall & wind corrode.
The world is a myriad curious things,
A nest of Philosophical thinking.
Author notes
Structure A,B,C,C,D,E
My main aim was to sort of analyse the odd and often biwildering place that is our planet. To really set back and look at the world both with regard to both mankind and nature. One of the main angles I was trying to play on was the idea that however much someone consider the world it still has the capacity to suprise, delight, horror and mystify you. The world has the opportunity to show you awe-inspiring feats of endurance and the ability to chill you to your bones.
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Comments
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I have to admit I am a lover of end line rhyme more than slant or internal. The way you've used rhyme here makes the thought stand out ...at the same time I think it makes the rest of the write ineffectual. Just my opinion. Thank you for entering.
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Hmmm
I just realized that i am a sucker for rhyming, I don't know if that is a limitation i need to over come or something that defines me...
Well, it has lots of themes, all of which are very interesting however it seems that you are channeling Polonius from Shakespeare's "Hamlet", that being giving too much information or advice and in the process undermining each point due to the shear volume of them.
I liked the contrast with the human activities and the natural phenomenon in the rhyming section. Were you trying to point to that contrast by having it as the only part of the poem that rhymes which gives it the spotlight against the rest of the poem?
That contrast being subtle yet effective is why i am applauding.
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