moonlight,
torn drapes
and you
serenity in a pauper’s realm
sepia tones of tranquil truth
watching as you sleep
little noises make me smile
wonder what you dream
is it me?
or do you yearn?
paranoias creeper overwhelms the trestle of my mind
I want to adore you
need you to let me
what if you leave?
what if you die?
I don’t fear death or loneliness
but absence of you…….terrifies
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oh my god mark this is so deep...i love this word,,its so sevendish or is sixtiish..who knows i felt your love for that special persona in your life..and yes it scares me too....terrifies is the right word............and after terrro comes horror..and this scares me even more.................great write, and thanks for telling me I am not alone in this crazy world,,,,,,,,,,,,,I know and this helps..all of us....for the love of words and the magic they produce............write on...bro...im dying i just wanted to say something that sounded cool...im dying..bro....lol..............us canadians are so whaced on beer...and hockey..not me though never touch the stuff..........
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thanks Laura
canadians sound like my kind of people..lol.....thanks for your kind words in regard to this message to my best friend
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oh wow!
BEAUTIFULLY WORDED
the last line in this CLOSES it and is beautiful!
one contradiction, that is fairly irrelevant, last 2 lines, i dont fear lonliness, but the absence of you terrifies,
but there is always others, and the individual is clearly portrayed as the importance
so dont change a thing
the rest of these will be a pleasure, im sure
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new approach here
tried to write in the same manner as the inner voice speaks,poetically,i believe this method has a lot of romantic potential,transferring those thoughts to paper is another challenge
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Very deep and emotional. Fear like that is very hard to overcome. I used to feel like that when my husband was so sick. Very good write.
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your husband is a lucky man
longevity in a relationship is rare and the down side ,devastating,i wish you and hubby many more and happy years
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TOU WRITE WITH HUGE SKILL
PAINTING SIMPLICITY IN BEAUTIFUL SHADES IS AN ART FORM
BRAVO
T
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thanks again
you flatter me......I accept haha ;-)
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