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Evanescence (An Opus En Progreso)

"Hush little baby, don't say a word
daddy's gonna' buy you a mocking bird"







f    a    d    i    n  g

                                                                gradually

v    a    n    i    s    h    i    n    g

from [[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[sight


like the whisp
of her in the morning mist



vanished  banished 
to thy closet
unholy daughter
[[[[[[pay hommage]]]..........................with psalm................and.........hidden alms]]]]]]]]]]]]]]






Kyrie Eleison

Christi Eleison


HEAR ME, Padre mia
in my total
abject lack
of laudible sound...........................crying in the wilderness .......................


i dwell
in a fatherless house

communique de absentia
"hallow be thy name"

below
beyond preternatal speech.

in utero?????????????????????????????????????????we know!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

injected
infected
'beyond' the natural.

preternatural curiosity,
with a preternaturally acute ear

surgically pinned big ears
in arrears
it appears
for "beauty's ache

"Just call me angel of the morning, baby
Just touch my face before you leave me..."

whole-y
un fallen
endowed with preternatural speed
beyond Man's inhumane capacity
to imbue words' unkind intent-shun

bleed unseen fairy
query long into the fevered-night
where blight of tight-fisted fright
ignite ...................................i  l  l  u  m  i  n  e  d.................sight.

Pater Noster:

deliver me from thy evil!

be-deviled defiled reviled in thy morning kaddish

lead me not into sin
im-peccatos






Miserere Domine



"and if that mocking bird don't sing
mommie's gonna' buy you a diamond ring..."









{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{{where were you madre mia???????????????





spurned, churned, burned in the labyrinth
of torment's hell








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  • gislanni
    October 27

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    Hm, I rather liked this poem. My suggestions is you however eliminate the last four lines: O well

    "all's well that ends swell"


    dadadadad...schism....... ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, that's all folks .................

    to keep the poem as intense. And the creative use of spacing would serve better without punctuation.