Yeah...I have been thinking of you..
All day long,
Yes, I know this is wrong,
These thoughts of you...
Should not be in my head,
Oh Amy,
I had a bad ol' day...
and I am asking for one thing...
that takes my dreadful day away,
Oh please...
Let it be done...
Oh Amy,
Can we have some fun?
Amy please..
I don't mean to be rude,
It's just...
I really in the mood,
Please...
It will make my day,
Amy please...
What would you say?!!!
Amy, right now...
I need you,
You're like a drug,
Amy, you know..
you know when we do it...
It is so good!!
Oh Please...Amy!!!
Please just give me a kiss,
I really need your help,
Start with a little a kiss...
This will be so swell!!
I had a bad ol' day,
Please..
Will you turn it around?
Oh Amy,
I'm so down...
Oh Amy...
I so want you...now!!
Oh please...
Let it be done...
Oh Amy,
Let's just have some fun,
A contest entry
- Round 1: Enter Anything you want! by Sheilasbabygal4life.
400 points, ended October 23, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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A very intersting write. It seems to move along like the lyrics to a song. I didn't intend for that to rhyme..lol. It express the base desire in a young gentleman for a women he obviously finds attractive. Sexual, without being blantant. I can't decide if he is expressing desire or coming dangerously close to that line which rings "stalker"
Nice job, smiles
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Thank you
My first draft was far more sexual!
Really it's just about a guy who just wants to realise a lot of tension he is feeling and what better way to release it with sex
..and cool I like that you think he does have a stalker aspect it makes it more darker 
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this was really different then most things ive read, i enjoyed it thoughhh.
ps.. thanks for the comment
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Thanks
That's nice of you to say!
I do try to something different every time, so thanks
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This was very enjoyable too read. You can go too round 2! So keep up the good work. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in ROund 2.
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Well thank you!!
That is so nice of you!
I'm so pleased you enjoyed it!
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amazin freddi,you are always surprisin me...i love this " oh " in your poems very impreesing ....great job,keep it up
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thanks deedee, I tried to write a bit differently on this one. I hope it paid off!!
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yeah it's very sweet,i feel it different,well write it's one of ma fave in your stuff !!
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