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The Disposable Message of Royal Colours that Smother the S.A.D



 

The heart beats loud with somber rhythmic ballards

as deciduous trees abandon norishment

and poets weave beautiful lines into the autumn hues

of red and gold that precursor our greed; 

as the rays of goodwill are lost 

to an overcast blanket that smothers the lion

and is it any wonder 
that more families divide

and more suicides arise at this time of year

as we slide deeper into the stench of a currupt system

that gives you credit whilst breaking the pride;

and those who are gust away by the end of a whisper 

scream at all hallows eve that life is disposable

and you are but a fraction in time;

who makes their own presents  

 

because it's dark outside when those without roots

have to numb down the pain with junk and wine

as all consuming prospectors step over the homeless

like scraps of meat, left to rot under sparkling lights;

when everyone of us has the intrinsic ability to care

but continue to shed those red and gold hues

that conquer the hope of each child who's born kind.





 

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  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 21

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    it is the one who are able to wa;k through life's chaos who could the ones who cannot,

    and when we see we are surrounded by dark, we can be the light

    first we need to notice injustice then we need to become a solution

    very powerful shout out and a remarkable awareness

    great write

    one well needed

    God bless you my friend...


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 17

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    I think this poem has to offer and say.. I personally fouund myself nodding at alot of the stuff you said. I guess this is what the times are all about


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    October 11

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    Ok I havent even read the poem just yet but I have to strongly suggest to change the colouring on ALL of this as it almost blinded! me as I loaded up the page. It is very hard to read as the background detracts so heavily from the words on the page that I can't even begin to focus as I'm getting a headache :s
    I'm sorry I really can't read this with this background it hurts my eyes. Please change it and then let me know so I can read and judge fairly.
    Laura.


  • AutumnAshe
    October 8
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    Very Creative take on the topic!


  • foreheadofgod
    October 7

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    i really enjoyed this and feel lucky to get to be one of the first people to read it and comment on it...a lot of great art has been created linking autumn with death and although this poem does it very well my favorite part of the entire work is the title, because to me it can take all of those intense and depressing feelings of death and despair one gets during the season and reduce it down to simply not getting enough sunlight and vitamin D. and i know thats a gross oversimplification but still a fun one. i really enjoyed it and i know you just put it up like an hour ago but i did notice a few possible typos you might want to get..in the first line sense is spelled sence.poets breath beauty i think is supposed to be breathe beauty. deciduas is spelled deciduous. but the i only reason i point these out is because it was a really intense piece and i liked it very much. i especially enjoyed the symbolism of "as the rays of goodwill are lost in a blanket that smothers the lion". But i believe the last two lines were my favorite because they were beautiful, interesting and a good clincher for the work.i wish i could give more than the applause im allowed for this one since its really am indictment of the holiday season we are entering....but by the way i still love christmas and getting presents because at heart my ego is a horrible bastard and i an extremely selfish and disguisting human being

    • pineapple-eyes gold member
      October 12
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      Thank you ever so much for your gracious comment and for picking me up on the typos. I am glad you enjoyed the write and don't be to hard on yourself, I am sure you are not as selfish as you imagine. For a start this write, said something to you..... Much care....

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