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Wishing Hell is especially hot...

I roll off the bed.
I breathe in this air and remember what life is like.
I breathe out and remember everything is still going in circles,
Sleep, eat, work, fuck, sleep &
Repeat.

I bet there’s a million people,
Sitting there with their mouths open wide,
Gasping for some kind of excitement.
Counting ceiling tiles,
Watching the second hand dance in circles
Around the ugly clock face,
Wishing they were somewhere else.
Wishing hell is especially hot for the man who came up with
The idea of “routine.”
Praying for some kind of excuse to escape
Four white walls and florescent lights.

Author notes

s i n k f l o r i d a s i n k.
I quit AP, started back after this prompt...hope it's okay.

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  • Tzipora
    November 7

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    i loved this. i've been looking at your page hoping something new would be posted, its about time. and it was a worth while wait. this was honest and humorous at the same time.

    - well done.


    • sinkfloridasink
      November 9
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      thank you, that means a lot! I've been really busy, however i've been writing alot I just don't have time to post it on here.


  • sweet arrival gold member
    October 7

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    i wanted to smile when i read this, maybe the sarcasm in it. yet i couldn't because the truth in this is all too real.

    we all need an escape from routine... makes me thankful for creativity and spur of the moment friends. good luck in this contest.