Long, glistening years lie ahead of us
comfortable nights filled with a silent mystic
You are you, I am me, and in turn we are each other.
There is nothing now that I can say
that I haven't said before, knowing
that this is us for eternity, alive,
together, full of love.
To say goodbye to you would be
the end of me, and whilst we are
bound in truth and beauty,
we do prepare for these things.
I am weak of heart and small in frame
and long away as it may seem, the time
will come one day; remember me as saying this now
Come here darling, move a little closer,
no closer still, this is important - I really do
love you,
and if anything should
happen - no, just listen to me -
if anything should happen...
then it's the penultimate cliche in saying
that you must, of course, move on
it will make you and break you simultaneously,
but you will do this, and you must never feel guilty
because my love, and only because,
when I am long passed, I will send an
angel
down from Heaven.
And when she finds you - you'll know.
Please tell me what you think
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deep
write you have penned
full of emotion and love
love this stanza..
Long, glistening years lie ahead of us
comfortable nights filled with a silent mystic
You are you, I am me, and in turn we are each other.
well done poet
keep up the good work
thanks for the share
Darky
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Thankyou so much for your kind comment! It's deeply appreciated and really means a lot.
Thankyou for reading
Love and hugs,
Jess x
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This is a poem that triggered an epiphany. Excellent job, I had to reread it to try and absorb everything written there. It truly speaks volumes in so few words. Amazing job.
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I'm so glad you got something out of this piece, and that you felt it meant something. I appreciate it so much that you took the time to read - for that, I am forever grateful!
Many thanks,
Jess x
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This poem was so moving, heartfelt, and sincere. What an awesome feeling it is to know that someone out there feels this way about you all of the time. I really enjoyed every line in this and congratulate you on being today's spotlighted poet!
Thanks a lot for sharing your talent with all of us here and keep up the wonderful work! Take care and stay inspired my friend!
Jeremy0826
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Thankyou so much for reading, I really appreciate it! I know - I still can't believe it got submitted.
Thankyou again and God bless,
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You are very welcome Jess, it's my pleasure! Take care!
Jeremy0826
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This poem is what lovers, those who TRULY love one another, tell each other. It says everything I would want to say. It was beautiful. Wonderful job.
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Thankyou so, so much - I mean that with all my heart.
Hugs,
Jess x
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I especially love your form of communication about sending an angel down from
heaven. And when she finds you-you'll know. To me you have captured
such a beautiful form of a couple connecting heart to heart.
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Thankyou for your comment I am overwhelmed at the reception this piece has got, I thought it was one of my weakest! But I'm so happy that you like it, and it means a lot that you read, and complimented me so. Thankyou from the bottom of my heart.
Hugs,
Jess x
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A fact none of us want to face. I know. I lost my hubby in 2000. Still rough. This is deep and sad. Very well written, a good message. God bless.
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I really am deeply sorry to hear about your loss. There is no joy like loving someone, and no pain like losing them. My thoughts are with you - I mean that.
Thankyou for reading and commenting, it means a lot.
God bless,
Jess x
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This was bittersweet. But most of what I think about this poem has already been mentioned!
It is so loving and natural the way it is written. It is chilling and beautiful, sad, and hopeful all at once. I really enjoyed this and it was the title that drew me in. By the title, this is not what I was expecting, but it works so well.
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Thankyou very much for that lovely comment, I'm so happy you enjoyed the piece! And I feel glad that you think the title seems to work.
I'm forever grateful that you read my piece and will always remember your compliments
Jess x
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Beautiful!!
I have chills! This is so loving and tender! In the sadness you can feel the love! Congratulations on the Spotlight! Very much deserving!
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Aww, thankyou so much I don't know if it's worthy of the spotlight but I feel so, so lucky!! I'm glad you liked it!
Thankyou again
Hugs,
Jess x
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Wow. An unbelievable poem with a perfect fitting title. It is MOST CERTAINLY worth something and alot at that. For most of us this is a situation not readily analyzed or thought about; a situation that would be among the hardest in life. You, poet, have made us all take a deeper look at ourselves which in itself makes it a wonderful write. That coupled with the superb flow and feeling is exceptional. I'm favoriting this.
Peace Love
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Your comment just made my day. Thankyou so, so much for reading this and actually getting something out of it, you've no idea how much it means that you thought it was good! I still can't believe it's in the spotlight. I never thought this would happen to one of my pieces.
You're very kind, and I appreciate it so much.
Hugs,
Jess
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I am in love with this. There are so many aspects to it that just ring of love. "no wait, just listen to me". You can hear the objection by the loved one."Come here darling, move a little closer, no closer still, if anything should happen...." "It will make you and break you simultaneously, but you will do this and you must never feel guilty". These are words that have probably been spoken thousands of times by "true love". The dash a the end is a perfect expression representing the span between the present and the future, the time it will take to find one another again.
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Thankyou so, so much for your kind comment - I mean it, you don't know how much it means. You're wonderful for taking the time to read, and for being so generous.
And thankyou very much for the claps
Hugs,
Jess x
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Wonderful...
Sublime vows of togetherness in the eternity of love "Do Not Resuscitate" dedicates. An inspiring loyalty and union diffuser in poetic beauty.
In respect and admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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i love this... it's so beautiful, and deep.... i especially loved the last line "and when she finds you - you'll know. Great job!
Lillie
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Thankyou so much for your comment it is deeply appreciated. I'm not actually too sure about this one... but it means a lot that you took the time to read. I hope you think it could be worth something?
Thankyou again
Hugs,
Jess x
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This is just such a beautiful piece of poetry and expression....
so good......"no just listen to me"
so real, I almost felt intrusive..
some of these words hit me right in the heart lass...
I related some things to my own journey...
the end was stellar...
Poet's encompasses existence
in time and space
before and after our awareness.....
so much of what might be...
writing of what can be..
if we all believe in
"nights filled with a
silent mystic".
Bless you always
Little gypsy,
Liam
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I like the dash, it's like it links the thoughts but there is a pause in the middle, which is cool because that is what this line is about, after a pause and missing you, your love will be found by the angel you send from heaven.
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Thankyou very much for your advice, I've decided I think I like the dash better as well.
Take care, I'll be sure to check out your work soon! x
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angelic love
that's really beautiful. love the line: "You are you, I am me, and in turn we are each other" even though there is a small typo - eachother= each other - love the dedication at the end - very moving.
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Do you think the last line is better with a comma or a dash?
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Aww, thankyou!
Is that right? I used to spell it like eachother, and when I saw other people putting a gap in the middle I just carried on out of habit - so each other is the correct way, yeah? Thanks for pointing that out
I'm so glad you liked it, and really appreciate that you read it.
Thankyou again,
Hugs,
Jess x
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