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Oblivious?

Remember butterflies,
their delicate innocence,
fluttering around so obliviously,
searching for darling little flowers,
unaware,
of what they do to me.

Soft warm blue glow,
like loving eyes,
like stormy skies
encompass
this dreary world

A loving touch,
like velvet wings,
like angelic hugs,
a relentless dance
of weary lovers

Soft wet drops,
like falling rain,
like forbidden tears,
may we open the floodgate,
drench the barren field.


While you,
make the butterflies dance,
stare deep inside these eyes,
inflame a shadowed world,
and absolve his miseries. 

Author notes

Hmmm... Gotta read a dictionary... or something >_>

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  • Adveshan
    November 19
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    Pretty darn good

    Quick flow to it, good aesthetics.


  • Kitten From Hell
    November 4

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    wow i loved it soo much

    Soft wet drops,
    like falling rain,
    like forbidden tears

    my favie lines good job ~Ella

  • TOTALLY AH-MAZING !!!!!!!!

    ily phoenix that was beautiful


  • Phoenix Shadow
    October 15
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    Fine, I'll be the first one to comment then

    This is the lamest 'poem' ever You should give up on poetry, give up on life and go away && never come back.

    But that's just my professional opinion.

    --ps