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stumble, fall, die.

lilypads of hope float above a fragile abyss. mountaintops were never this hard to manuever but lies were never easier to roll off your tongue like water on a windshield.

stepping forward, i took a breath. i didn't look back to see which stones had crumbled behind me or bridge's that were burnt.









instead, i thought about how i would die when i stumbled.

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Never think about the mistakes you made. Think about the mistakes you will make.

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  • The odd one
    November 4
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    -grumbles something about beating you and stealing half your brain so she can write things like this-


  • o0-Wall-Flower-0o
    October 9
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    wow thats really good =]


  • Inconspicuous.
    October 8

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    Wow. this is amazing. its funny to read something that another person has written and you find yourself wishing that you had thought those exact thoughts yourself. i've been at this point so many times. the only reassurance is to remember that from every mistake you make, something great will happen. it just takes time. great write Mr. Shexy.


  • Overlord Darklight
    October 8

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    Matt.

    ...you have done it yet again.
    I agree full-heartedly with the comment below; left by Janetheplain...
    ...like water on a windshield.

    ...so very, very appropriate and aptly composed.
    The image of water rolling and beading off a windshield is a dramatic
    one that I have never considered before.

    ...so very, very well done.
    (bows lower than for most)

    This poem... is oddly congruent with some things I have going on, sir.
    ...you took me aback, a shade.

    I will consider this to be an omen, Matt.
    ...thank you for your insights, yet again.


  • Janetheplain
    October 7

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    Beautiful imagery. The first stanza is pretty much perfect. Love this.

    "But lies were never easier to roll off your tongue like water on a windshield."


  • Tzipora
    October 7
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    well done.


  • ladybug.
    October 7

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    You shouldn't have entered Mattia.
    It isn't fair to everyone else.
    xD

    Seriously though. You've got a damn-near perfect sense of imagery.
    Just sayin'.


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 6
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    haha Bravo.

    A little competition here

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