Word most foul;
Word most bitter;
Word most utterly fucking useless.
We're splitting the sky asunder
With our lips sewn shut
Tongues torn from the root
Reflections in our eyes
Of that creative escape
To find a new balance
And save us.
A failure.
Experiment and experimenter both.
Like mice trapped in the dark,
Our bleeding fingers scraping madly
For a way out of this fermenting empty
Like a child pushing a paper boat
Out to sea, out to see,
To be grasped and understood.
Now we let our boats sink,
Let them crash upon the rock
Sink away our failures
Lay them to rest
Hold up the bleeding stumps
Of our useless silly tongues
For the Word is not with God
And the Word is not Good.
"Behold the word as scourge of human destiny. Behold the world in other people, life is charity."
Author notes
This was inspired by Protest the Hero and by my own observations of the people I deal with daily.
Allusions:
Protest the Hero - Spoils
Please tell me what you think
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I think that the first two verses could use work because they read choppy and blocky. But I liked the rest of it from 'Like mice trapped in the dark,' to 'And the Word is not Good.' because of the imagery you get when you read those verses. And I definitely would have to agree with the last verse you wrote, definitely would agree with that
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Found it pointless and boring, waste of my time personally,
don't see how anyone could enjoy this poem, its course and badly written, all you have done is splurge some lines on a peice of paper, and to be honest it doesn't make sense in any reality,
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Nice lack of response, dick.
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Lol I think someone is getting stressy
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Stressy is not a word. And I don't think calling you a dick really qualifies. I'm just amused at your lack of actual ability to criticize.
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Well how can you really say "stressy" is not a word, how can any of these "words" actaully exist when they are a manifestation of a stupid race, where so far as we know no other place in the universe actually knows what they mean. All words have been created by humans, so what is it to say "stressy" isn't a word, who are you to say I cannot create a word when everything you a speaking is just made up. I am also able to criticize I just feel you are not worth the time or effort on my behalf. I mean do you really care that much, What does it acheive when no matter what you do in life, or what you say, everyone ends up in the same place. Dead.
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The length of your comment testifies to how little time you clearly have. And what about that comment really had anything to do with me? Dick.
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Just out of curiousity, how does it not make any sense?
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Loved your languge play 'God and Good' sea and see. You create a depth of imagery which translates well to the reader. The style is forward thinking and you are trying something original which I always respect. my favorite line ' Like mice trapped in the dark,Our bleeding fingers scraping madly' Great read!
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