Revolting
Disgusting
Injecting
My dreamer
Remember
My lover
Consider
The danger
Remember the excuses that run through my head filling up my thoughts, my words, like a waterfall I'm drowning in. Tearing down the lines on my skin feeling the wind rush through the hole in my skull even though I haven't moved in days.
Don't you tell me I'm okay
Don't you tell me I'm okay
Don't you tell me I can live
Don't you tell me how I feel
Don't you...
Falling
Flying
Hanging
Breathing
Questioning
My reasoning
Revelling
In my decieving
Whispers of angry voices follow me running naked through the woods, spectres of a family begging me to do what I already know I could. Memories of forgotten days flash through my head as I held my daughter as she smiled at the stranger I used to be.
Don't you tell me you know me
Don't you tell me you know me
Don't you tell me I'm okay
Don't you....
It's broken up
It want's me dead
God damn this noise inside my head
Broken up
Wants me dead
God damn this noise inside my head
Don't you...
Don't you...
Don't you...
Save me
Author notes
This song I wrote in about five minutes so if it seems a little rough then I apologize. I took the working title, and the breakdown from the Nine Inch Nails song 'The Becoming'. I heard that song and immediately this one popped into my head and I wrote it out for your (hopeful) rocking pleasure. As always any critiques are more than welcome. XD
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Comments
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i absolutely love it!!! its so amazing, particularly the line "Revelling In my decieving". ah. amazing. I'm...awed. I'm brain-numbingly impressed. so very well done my friend.
x
Alyssa
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Eek...
So I'm behind on some of your work. Sorries love.
This hit me hard and held onto my attention like a looney running naked down Prospect in KC.
Excellent.
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