Halloween,
the night where children
dressed as ghostly beings emerge from their houses
running about the spooky streets, accepting sweets from fellow neighbours.
October
is known for this one special holiday
October wouldn't be October, without it
the one last day, makes the whole month; special.
Candy Apples
oh how we all love them,
sweet and covered in thick juicy tasting chocolate
dwelling on the taste as it evaporates in our mouths, melting on our tongues.
Light's of Pumpkins
candles burning inside of them, nice and bright
flickering as the wind haunts the streets
the tree branches swaying, reveling a full moon.
Author notes
Word Bank
Choose atleast 5 words from the word bank to create your poem. This option is more for the younger members. 15 and under.
Words used:
Halloween, October, Spooky, Pumpkin, Moon, Apples, Night. 
I hope you like! 
A contest entry
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This is how I feel, I'd love your thoughts on this poem.
Comments
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Thank you for your entry
Nice job with the word bank. Very descriptive and nice imagery too. In your second stanza you used October just a little too much but otherwise I really liked this poem. Please see your score below
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
TammyCriteria
20-18
Exceptional
17-14
Innovative
13-10
Commendable
9-6
Competent
5-1
Emerging
Score
Prompt Development
Expresses and develops meaningful and original perspective on prompt
Expressive and developed treatment of the prompt
Adequate focus and development
Some focus on prompt but lacks development
Unfocused and unclear
18
Organization
Form of poem appropriately and powerfully addresses the subject , each line focuses on prompt
Form of poem is appropriate to the subject, focus maintained throughout
Form of poem is appropriate to the subject focus maintained throughout
Form of poem is appropriate to the subject, focus maintained throughout
Form is poorly constructed, focus is not maintained throughout
17
Poetic Language & Imagery
Sensory details and figurative language create vivid images that contribute significantly to the meaning of the poem; sound devices such as rhyme, alliteration, or onomatopoeia are used effectively to contribute to the meaning of the poem
Sensory details, figurative languages and sound devices contribute to the meaning of the poem
Sensory details, figurative language and sound devices may be overused, underused or inappropriate to the topic
Confusing or inappropriate use of sensory details, figurative language or sound devices
No use of sensory details, figurative language or sound devices
18
Use of Language
Word choice is vivid and exact throughout; grammar, mechanics and usage are correct, enhancing the thoughts and images
Precise word choice; no error in grammar, spelling and mechanics
Word choice occasionally vague, repetitive or imprecise; few errors in grammar, mechanics or usage
Word choices tend to be vague, repetitive or imprecise;
Consistently difficult to understand due to errors in grammar, mechanics and usage
13.5
Overall Impact
Poem captivates and inspires reader; is an excellent representation of the prompt/form
Poem attracts reader’s attention; is a good representation of the prompt/form
Poem is adequate and provides a reasonable representation of the prompt/form
Poem lacks inspiration
Poem fails to inspire
17
Total
83.5/100
Averaged scores
Three judges averaged score.
78.8/100
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Thank You for Your Entry ~
I like how you've started each stanza with a title and continued the flow from that; it works well for me giving me the full burst of imagery intended from each stanza Great vocabulary and thoughts
Prompt Development = 18/20
Organization = 19/20
Poetic Language & Imagery = 18/20
Use of Language = 16/20
Overall Impact = 17/20
Total = 88/100
Best of Luck
Stay safe
Manda
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Thank you for your entry
You have some great words here, and some great feeling in the poem. It makes me feel like a kid again, wanting to dress up and wander around and collect lollies... and we don't celebrate it in Australia!!
Prompt Development = 17/20
Organization = 12/20
Poetic Language & Imagery = 11/20
Use of Language = 10/20
Overall Impact = 15/20
Total = 65/100
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Shari
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Thanks very much
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Really good poem! Haha now i want candy!!
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Lawl
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Ooooooh wowww!
Very imagation.. urr.. very.. like. Whats the words?!
Like.. urrrmm.. lets the imagionation go free LOL i was trying for something.. better but thats all i got!
Really good
Love you!
<3
xox
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Thanks Jelly! I love you (: <33
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Love you more apple (:
xox
<33 speak soon okay!
you keep smilin for me sweetheart (:
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wow
this paoem depicted the october month-the month of halooween so vey graphically. ilove dthe phrasinga nd the choice of words way too much.thans for sharing -
Whooo!!!!!
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As you wrote I got an image in my head and it reminded me of the previous Halloween experiences I've had! Yum! Bye!
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