Measure my life not by units of measure. Not inch or pound, or even passing second.
Do not put accomplishments or failures into a list for it is not through ink I exist.
Instead I offer you this test. Compare my life in respect to the rubber band.
How far did I stretch that humble instrument of torture. The endless joy of a child
with their innocence and wonder. Incessant did I pull at it, or did I hang it limply.
Sitting in my hand, so easily knocked from my grasp. Never would I allow that band fall.
At first it was clutched by clumsy grip, and then into curious monkey hands.
As I rebelled I might throw it to the ground, but come back for it I would.
In efforts to make a difference, I would test it to the maximum.
What worth hath it unless it can withstand such pressure? Controlled pain endured.
Through all the years it has stood up to my challenges. It is a good rubber band.
Only now as hands quake in last stirrings does it snap and break. Falling away.
It is now out of my hand.
Author notes
I so prefer rhyming, but I shall try this out; broaden my horizons and all that. So if it sucks worse than normal, that's why.
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Comments
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snap!
pliable, resilient, accomodating, compromising, tense yet not unwilling to go beyond pre-set limitations... great analogy. I liked it a lot.
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I really like the verbiage in this; you do well with prose, considering you are more preferred to rhyme.
It's a good philosophical-ish piece, and the metaphor was wound tight around the subject, and related well with each other.
At times it did seem a little wordy, but everything counteracted itself which made for a good read. Nice work.
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interesting take on the prompt. i like how you used the rubber band as a metaphor. i used to carry one in my pocket all the time. so true we are pulled and tugged in this life and have to bounce back over time we do wear out.
thanks for this entry
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interesting....the style is a bit different that from i'm used to...but still..it is quite poetic and i like the metaphor you went with this..nicely done
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