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In the Street

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A street mime
follows me,
I scream silently

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Senryu, an offshoot of Haiku that deals with human relationships, feelings and foibles rather than the natural world

pic: nervoustych.com/blog/

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  • Aalta
    November 18

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    Keep the scream silent... otherwise this mime may begin to scream away at you


  • TheQueenOfPoetry
    October 21

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    Ha-ha. I literally clapped. THis one made me chuckle for sure. Great job on the humor, originality and creativity.

    • Bruce silver member
      October 21
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      Thank you Tiff! You are so gracious with your comments!


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    October 14

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    to mimic ones mime.. is to mime your mimic.. to cry out silently no one hears ..to hurt and no one feels.. to sigh then breathe..a totality of silence rendered...to mime..
    love the depth of mind for you are the master dear bro as always Hugs Angel♥

    • Bruce silver member
      October 15
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      Wow! Great comment Angel! You are the Master dear!


  • ScarletO gold member
    October 13

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    LOL this is so funny. You have such a witty sense of humor.


  • whitecoffee
    October 11

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    Great one, Bruce!


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    October 6

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    I love the oxymoron feel of this


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    October 6

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    How delightful! A twisted ending made for a nice AHA moment. Write on my friend.

    Dennis

    • Bruce silver member
      October 7
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      Thanks so much Dennis! I always appreciate your kindness and upbeat comments!


  • Wandering Woman gold member
    October 6

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    Love it!

    Yes, I know exactly what you mean! So compact but to the point, I'm still laughing thinking of the vision!


  • Ez Writer silver member
    October 6

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    Bravo !!

    Truly this is a wonderful Senryu !
    In this write your silent screams come through .
    Just as the Mime would communicate too !
    Best regards , Friend Easy

    • Bruce silver member
      October 6
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      Hi EZ!

      Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

      Your demented Brother,

      Bruce


  • geckogirl silver member
    October 6

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    this is so cool. i love a mime, they are so talented just like you

    • Bruce silver member
      October 6
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      Thank you Sweet Sis! I'm gald you like them; you can have mime any time!


  • Cherrylv
    October 6

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    Giggles I can just imagine
    This is short and sweet and as usual says so much. You can be a man of few words or many but whatever the quantity it is always full of meaning you are not a word waster

    Cherry xxxx

    • Bruce silver member
      October 6
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      Thank you dear Cherry! What was Polonius' advice? "Neither a lender nor a borrower be . ." and certainly not a word waster!


  • Draig aine gold member
    October 6
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    perfect senyru, great picture

    • Bruce silver member
      October 6
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      My humble thanks! I am impressed by your use of the Old English form of "perfect"!

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