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Not bitter just battered



He dumped me and didn't say why
he left me in the dark
But now that I can see the light
I know for the very first time
There are plenty of other sharks in the sea
for the little fish to fry.

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  • Fallen-Thumper gold member
    October 8

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    I really liek this piece but sharks can be beaten down, they have their weakness; too. Hopefully you don't have to be hurt by any more sharks. A really jreat write and i really like it. Amazing! Keep writing and thanks for sharing.
    -penguin-


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    October 8
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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    Luckily there is always more out there though I hope you don't encounter any more sharks that may hurt you more A great short piece that packs alot of emotions within

    I hope you enjoy AllPoetry and continue to share your words with us
    ♥
    Stay safe
    ~Manda
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  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 6

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    This is short & to the point. Just loverly.
    I find that i like short form poetry better than reading novels of alliteration.
    Welcome to AP.
    Stop by for a any time.
    Joe (from Tenn.)