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Don't Come Over

It’s been a shaking thing
You’ve always got me quivering
Nasty, rotten, you
But this time I’ll toss the coin
Leave your side and kick your groin
Feisty, enlightened, me

Don’t come over, won’t be there for you for cover
The sun will shine on me today
Don’t need your blues, just go away
Don’t come over, I’m not satisfied when you cower
The rain is not here to stay
And your moves will not make me sway
So don’t, don’t, don’t come over

Life outside your amusement
Splashing and sparkling enjoyment
Misty, smitten, me
I could now enjoy the ride
Every night another slide
Dusty, bitten, you

Don’t come over, won’t be there for you for cover
The sun will shine on me today
Don’t need your blues, just go away
Don’t come over, I’m not satisfied when you cower
The rain is not here to stay
And your moves will not make me sway
So don’t, don’t, don’t come over

I’m not going to be lowered by you
(Nasty, rotten and coward you)
And  yes I’m going to be me
(Feisty, enlightened and misty me)

Don’t come over, won’t be there for you for cover
The sun will shine on me today
Don’t need your blues, just go away
Don’t come over, I’m not satisfied when you cower
The rain is not here to stay
And your moves will not make me sway
So don’t, don’t, don’t come over...



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  • lindaburns gold member
    October 20

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    Uh Oh

    I like it.
    “I’m not going to be lowered by you
    (Nasty, rotten and coward you)
    And  yes I’m going to be me
    (Feisty, enlightened and misty me)”
    “Don’t come over, won’t be there for you for cover
    The sun will shine on me today
    Don’t need your blues, just go away
    Don’t come over, I’m not satisfied when you cower
    The rain is not here to stay
    And your moves will not make me sway
    So don’t, don’t, don’t come over”
    I see you giving me “a run for my money” in this contest. Good luck.


  • Amera gold member
    October 12

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    Wow! This is really different comming from your pen. The raw emotion is very powerful. You must really be pissed at someone.

    Love,
    Amera