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Come home after school

my mommy looked to me

she asked me what i learned

in school today

 

I told her I learned nothing

Nothing that really mattered

Learned two plus two is four

but there must be something more

 

They did not explain to me

What the butterflies in my stomach means

when i look at this girl

who sits right next to me

 

they did not tell me the words to say

when i saw my grandfather die that day

or show me how to live

with fame and wealth like those on tv

 

so tell me mommy who will teach me

the lessens in life worth learning

who will show me the way to go

to live my life to the fullest

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  • heart and soul
    November 4

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    I agree, felt this way since well forever. School does not exactly teach us what we need to know to make our lives into something more. Heck I stopped believe in school in 1st grade, but still managed to be at the top of the class. Ant who.
    Something about this does not have the power other peices I have read of your have, though does convay a very true thought.
    well keep on writing!


    • Darc Raven
      November 5
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      that "something" you speak of is probabally the fact that this piece was written durring a quickie and the subject was the prompt... and i do not write well from prompts... especially without a muse. lol


  • serenity silvermoon
    October 23
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    wow hun great poem great poem on how we are taught or more like how we are not taught thank you for sharing such a wonderful poem with us all keep up the great job


  • Eavan Max
    October 18

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    Darc this wa good very good. it gives great insites to how we are taught or should i say not taught that which is important. This shows great insight and thought. You have done a good job here


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    October 6

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    *giggles* hey this was good. I liked it. Gave me a slight giggle on how our children are taught and not tought the important things in life. But I guess it is up to us parents to teach our children some of thos questions you asked Great Job.l


  • Naridill gold member
    October 6
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    Again - we are all lucky Heather can't count


  • Griswold gold member
    October 6

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    Very nicely done for the prompt, at least you used all of it, I forgot most of it myself... You really need to take a class on titling your poems though...lol Best of luck... Scott


    • Darc Raven
      October 6
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      tilting a poem? but that taked the fun out of freewrite! lol.


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 6
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    Bravo!

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