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Eternity has no boundaries
Take it in with outstretched arms,
Eyes shut; the fear disperses
Sweetness floods the willing heart.

Spinning in a vortex, leaning cruciform
Savouring the warm aroma of new hope,
The nexus; the focal measure of the destiny
The next meal of an exuberant soul.

Author notes


Prompt:- Bending backwards just to taste the sky


Sorry, told you I wasn’t very good at quickies.

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  • Brook-1 gold member
    November 10

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    Wow, what a nice take on the prompt. This is so lovely and yet so deep. You have the pondering effect down pat. I love this. Keep on penning. Thank you for letting me share in this nice poem by reading it.
    Brook


  • lovelifelive gold member
    October 10

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    I like this and believe yo udid a great job , I am greedy so yes I would like for it been longer but even in this short form you got the point across so all I can stay is wait til the contest over and revise it then noone said it had to stay this way but I love so do what you want.


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    October 6

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    I always thought you were pretty good at any form of poetry you turned your hand to and this is no exception



    Love Margaret

    p.s. Sorry, but you know I don't like to critique...


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 6
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    Bravo.


  • Griswold silver member
    October 6

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    the best way to get good at quickies is to enter them and fine tune your thinking to the judges likes and dislikes. Certain ones are not worth entering because the same poets win them over and over again,it gets rather boring. Well done and best of luck to you... Scott


    • WarrioroftheHeart gold member
      October 7
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      It is more the time and line constraints that bother me about quickies than anything else Scott; it tends to take me a long time before I write something that I am happy with and if I am not happy with it I really don't care if someone else is.

      This is not that bad but, given a little more time (and less length constraints), I feel I may have given the prompt a better service.

      Thank you for your wishes,

      Adrian.


  • Recluse Writer gold member
    October 6

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    hmmmmm...I have been here and you have left me well behind unless I use the dictionary...but hey you know that is not me unless I hafta

    Sista oxo

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