Dear Adrieline,
I saw you standing there, the sun rising then falling just as quickly,
you were so beautiful.
Don't think that I care for you, for i assure you,
I do not.
I, along with so many others, just want to get into your knickers.
For behind that startling beauty, when I look deep into the shimmering sea of blue, (that is to say 'deep' in the romantic, made-up, bullshit sense, for there is nothing 'deep' about your eyes) I see a vast cavern of vacuous crap.
You hide behind false emotion, just as easily as i hide behind a solid wall.
And so to conclude, i set you free my dear, run from behind that wall.
With this new found freedom, feel free to jump in my pants.
Love Alex
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You hide behind false emotion, just as I hide behind a solid wall
And so to conclude, I set you free my dear, run from behind that wall
With this found freedom, feel freeto jump in my pants.
Beautiful lines indeed!
Your ideas are fantastic
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Vacuous... Love it!
I liked the way you approached this... It strats off being all Loveydovey, and becomes something utterly different!
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thank you very much, i started a contest like this of my own because i thought it was such a good idea. feel free to enter
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"Don't think that I care for you, for i assure you,
I do not."
"(that is to say 'deep' in the romantic, made-up, bullshit sense, for there is nothing 'deep' about your eyes)"
"feel free to jump in my pants."
this was amazing. i love it.....
the fact that you are writing to some one and making it so beautiful. i just love it
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wow. Thank you very much. Thats really nice of you, i'll be sure to look at some of your work :-)
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