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Before Innocent Eyes



With an idle attitude, the eyes stare,
ushered a witness of 'right' becoming
'wrong'.

Since when we call the 'grey' 'white',
or these small dangling wisps of hair
'dream ropes'? Since when?

Injustice has put pink puffs on cheeks
and yet we accuse the winter for being
too cold.

Life plays a scene before these eyes,
a scene that is not yet identified.
What's in the core, what's the meaning?
Why is that other person... screaming? Screaming???

But the answers are in a forbidden land
where everything turns slowly, very slowly,
                                                                    grey
                                                                         and gets lost.

Isn't there anyone to conjure a ribbon of hope
                                              and cover this child's eyes?

 

 

 

(C)Noor 10/6/2009 

Author notes

Contest prompt:
Picture credit: Enigmatic-Character- By avotius

 

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Looking at this picture I could only see her looking at a rape scene or a slavery scene. These were common at the time of war. Sorry if I took in another way than you wanted (contest host).

 

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  • Ken-Maverick
    October 5

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    This write went so well with the picture indeed!!!
    What a story you've told here.

    Ken


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 5

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    SO SAD!!!!!!

    Always in this world the ones who suffer the most during any conflict are the children, the women, the ones who are innocent , standing back but not able to stay out of the way of the terrible sorrows of conflict.


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 5

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    you can see such innocence

    we should see ourselves through the eyes of children

    they watch and learn and we create and mold them

    I love where you brought this

    absolutely stunning write Noor

    God bless you my friend...


  • mgmc gold member
    October 5

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    A very creative take on the prompt. I'm happy you wrote about what YOU saw in the picture. Your poem appears very well crafted and offers a plausible explanation for the "enigmatic character." Imagery, overall style, flow all come together very nicely. Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    October 5

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    the beauty of a child and the pain upon her face prayed she was not hurt form her eyes they displayed the disbelief on life they seem to say and wonders where they will lead her today Hugs and stunning dear sweet Sis love the message here you bring love Angel♥

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