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still see you

I close my eyes, yet still see those times you made me smile so easy.
There in the middle of the busy street,
you held my hand and i did feel,
the warmth love and concern, so fatherly,
yet inbetween the noise and rush ,
my heartbeat gave a strange thud and right at that moment you looked at me, said is that your heart that sings so sweet.

i close my eyes, yet still see those times you said you'd love me endlessly.
There in the cold night besides the green, i skipped a beat when you first proposed to me.
The ultimate degree of feeling complete and from that moment on i started living in dreams.

i close my eyes, yet still see you, for now there are no more dreams without you. I dream of reality, of future, of the times ahead, just you and me .

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  • Ken-Maverick
    October 11

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    JUDGED!

    A wonderful take on the prompt...

    Well done indeed poet.

    Thanks for entering
    and all the best to you in the contest.

    Ken


  • wave1080
    October 8
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    awww !

    this is good yaar that significant other is lucky !