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The Principle of Uncertainty

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The Principle of Uncertainty


I close my eyes and yet I see ...
When Occam’s razor shaved my mind,
Of notions and reality.
This paradox is undefined.

Such thoughts are my dichotomy;
I try to stop the fast rewind
And sort it out objectively.
This paradox is undefined.

It burns with such acidity.
I scream for mercy; strike me blind!
A thirsty quagmire threatens me,
This paradox is undefined.

I close my eyes and yet I see ...
This paradox is undefined.

 

 

 

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Art Work by Jim Warren

Quantum mechanics, Occam's razor

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  • Sydney Carton
    November 16

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    The simplest explanation is probably going to be the correct one. The fewer variables, the less chance there is of getting something wrong. I always thought poets cared more about love than philosophy. Does the quantum mechanics part of your note have anything to do with Schroedinger's Cat? The old: can God create a stone too heavy...riddle? Either way, I like it.


  • sinfull
    October 27

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    first followed link to learn what the term Occam's razor means...kudos for enriching vocab/understanding.

    Mind stripped of all inticities
    Occam's razor leaves you blind
    (she closes eyes yet still she see's)
    answers shaved from razored mind
    Thus paradox still undefined

    The skillful use of the form adds to the strength of the message . Well done!


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 23

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    WOW

    Exceptional, very deep, very visceral this is a piece that forces thought even if one rather not wants to think..at least that's what i think!
    the Queen of form and content just served up another 'headknocker'..


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    October 15

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    This poetry speaks to me! It really grabs me and I feel like you heard what my heart have whispered...

    Lovely poem and a great art to accompany the poem!

    Love
    ♥~♥~♥
    Becks

  • vivuyo
    October 13

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    everything that is written is realistic. every word carries sense. less poetic which make the message easy to grasp and comprehend.

    truly a wonderful piece!!!



  • Desire gold member
    October 12

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    Oy~

    Now that is an Image and Your words just complimented~
    No picture needed~ I felt it pull...
    eyes closed..just vivid~ Bravo!
    I Love it when You pen in this form~
    So Inspires!!!

    Keep that quill dancing

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in all You do Beautiful
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Summer52
    October 11

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    Par Excellence !

    You are truly beyond compare, my friend.


  • Ken-Maverick
    October 11

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    JUDGED!!

    I really liked the rhythm and flow in this!!
    Wonderfully worded indeed...

    Thanks for entering,
    and all the best to you in this contest.

    Ken


    • Amera gold member
      October 11
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      Of course a Kyrielle sonnet has rhyme and flow; I’m sorry you missed the point of the poem.


  • HaleyMary
    October 8

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    Beautiful write, Amera. I love the part about paradox. seems life is a paradox in so many ways sometimes. also love the quantum spin of uncertainty you've added to the poem, as well. Thanks for messaging me and letting me know about your quantum write. Keep that pen flowing.


  • nordicsky silver member
    October 8

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    Occrams razor (entia non sunt multiplicanda praeter necessitate) this translates as, things must not be multiplied beyond necessity.

    When I write, I should write succinctly using only words that carry forward my ideas, imagery, or narrative. If Amera says so, then it must be true.

    So far so good, but then it got better, because I thought about the paradox. We close our eyes, blank out the world and solid reality. Things should be less complicated but they are not. Instead, our minds become even more active as they fill with detailed images of the past and imaginative speculation about the future. Thus, we see more with our eyes shut than with them open.

    Thanks for posting this; your poetry is fun, fun, fun.
    Love, Peter


  • Cannonsfire
    October 7

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    Well even in light of your marriage, the queen has not lost her touch with form. So very well done C


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    October 7

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    I close my eyes and yet I see ...
    This paradox is undefined.

    very clever and well penned. you took this home and brought the message to home plate bravo Hugs and thank you for sharing your work Hugs Angel♥


  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 7

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    A Jim Warren painting...Surprised! Your poem surely is cleverly penned, dear niece...Most of us would not dare try to attempt it as a prompt...and you have done excellently!....a paradox for sure! All the best in the contest! aunt


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 7
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    Bravo!!


  • poisonivystar4
    October 6

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    Wow! I like that!


  • melphleg gold member
    October 6

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    I'm not going to even attempt to get my head around this one. I read about Occam's razor and in theory understood it somewhat. But that's as far as my sleep deprived brain will go. So I post this just to let you know I read your poem.


  • The Gambler
    October 6

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    One of the most intelligent and interesting poems i have ever read. Truly amazing how you use vocabulary and form.

    The Gambler



  • SkyScraper Soul
    October 6

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    The title really grabbed my attention. I must admit that the 1st time I read it I really didn't grasp it, but after re-reading and breaking it down, especially with the help of Wiki's definition of the razor, I get it. Or do I? Maybe I do....lol.


  • Goddess of illusion
    October 6

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    I loved this... The title, the picture, the wording was beautiful... You let my mind within this maze...

    I really loved this

    I applaud you dear poet..


  • Inconspicuous.
    October 6

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    If you do not take the gold in this contest, there truly is a mistake. this is an impeccably written piece. your vocabulary is par to none i've seen before and i haven't read anything quite like this in my 9 years on allpoetry. great write and good luck.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 6

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    Much food for thought...

    Looks like you have a winner, Poet!! My best wishes to you in the contest!!
    Peace & Hugs,
    xx Cyn xx


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    October 6
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    One of your best, Sis.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 5

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    Excellent

    This of course is about the original K.I.S.S. Principle.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    October 5

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    Wow, I feel like watching the science channel now.

    Loved this Amera.


  • PerVirtuous
    October 5

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    Wow! You inspired me to precede you with a quantum poem of my own. This is cute and fantastic, too. Let me define it for you; we can never know. The end.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 5

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    A superpostional poem paradoxically portrayed as a pretty little kyrielle sonnet.

    I love the way you make a light form work to show a deeper point.

    Great stuff



    Jeff


  • crivanea silver member
    October 5

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    i love it!!! omg! i just wrote a Kryrielle Sonnet a while ago too!! it was my first one...but lol..after reading this one..it makes me wanna go and revise mine love it for once..i actually know the form you're writing about lol!


  • SteveS gold member
    October 5

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    A wonderfu lilt and tempo. You certainly make this form glow. I especially like how the larger, quick-syllable words lock in so rhythmically.


  • StarEyes
    October 5

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    Sis,

    I have sat here and read this like twice now, and still stunned! I am totally lost for words! You always seem to blow me away with your works!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta

  • Purrsanthema
    October 5

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    I remember that Einstein once said "God does not play at dice with the universe", and how another physicist replied: "Yes He does, and He throws the dice where we cannot see it". It seems you share Einstein's view in this poem!


  • C.I.M.A Punk
    October 5

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    The rhymes and meter are great.
    The content is also great, so philosphical and deep.

    Great job!


  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 5

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    ~~I close my eyes and yet I see ...
    When Occam’s razor shaved my mind,
    Of notions and reality.
    This paradox is undefined.~~
    This really grabbed my attention.
    One of your best. It really compliments the artwork.

    Joe


  • ZachP silver member
    October 5

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    My good and holy Lord! The rhymes! The brilliant rhymes, especially in the second stanza.

    It's been a while since I've written a kyrielle (like, two years, IIRC). I've fallen in love with this. My favorite work from you so far, dear poet. You manage to capture so much in a handful of syllables!

    Best of luck in the contest,
    Zach


  • awannabepoet
    October 5

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    Well Amera, your mind is just splendind and a treasure trove I must say.

    entia non sunt multiplicanda praeter necessitatem


  • BabyJuelzs
    October 5

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    wow certainly got my attintion
    amazing hun


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 5
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    I forgot, awesome image as well


    • Amera gold member
      October 5
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      Yea, I agree! Jim Warren is one of my favorite artists. The link to his page in in my notes. I met him last weekend in Disney World, he had a show there.


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 5

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    Amazing take on the prompt my dear
    I know that you have ventured "outside-the-box" as well
    However, I can relate to this piece very much
    The repeating line is very powerful
    which makes the Kyrielle Sonnet very unique
    Again you have dazzled me with your Brilliance*sigh*
    Bravo


    Wish you the best in the contest
    Much love my friend

    David


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 5

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    i have no idea what Quantum mechanics (outside Quantum Leap) is or Occam's razor but i do know that this is a good poem even without me understanding the basics of it. it relates to more then that, keep it flowing, hope what i said makes sense.

    • Amera gold member
      October 5
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      aww thanks! If I explain it will I get bunnys? Just kidding....


  • Darianna
    October 5

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    Wow! Big words and meanings in there! You've bent my mind into a pretzel! I'm hardly ever certain!

    Certain that I like this though!

    Dari xxx


  • Hikari Lady
    October 5

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    Ohh!! This was such a deep write, so insightful! You've taken the prompt into a new level and gave it some very unique feeling and meaning. I really enjoyed this as well as the form you've used for it. All the best to you in the contest, dear.

    Love
    ~Noor

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