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Give your Soul to me

Its time to die,
So I'll say my goodbyes
My mortal life.
Is close to over,
Immortal dreams, of ages it seems
My final screams
my eyes were opened.

I'm crying,
as Im dying,
And this hunger
is killing me

Etneral Pleas
The bloodlust in me
Terror in the night
are far from over
Immortal Pain
That trusts in my veins
Drink the death of me
and Live Forever

My hunt began
as the animal was within
the compassion died
and now it's over.
First Dusk to blood
My hunger overrun
This kill will be
to feed on ecstacy.

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  • Let.Love.In
    October 5

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    i liked this it was haunting in a mesmorizing kind of way and i really liked being pulled into it

    i dont know but i dont think there was a structure to this and if its a song you could try a chorus

    but it was good how it is

    ~Torii