there is a particular place
between awake time and sleep
where you can feel fairy tickles
and listen to angels whisper
a tempo of breath becomes
the doorway to secrets told
a place not to be forced
but a suspension in time
What did you think
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This would make a lovely lullaby if you could find a soothing tune that fits with the words! The imagry too is a wonderful elapse of metphores placed and warped into sayings and perfumes. Most elegant and sophisticated!
Great work, please keep it up
Best of luck
Dryad Enya
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Very nice work!
I really liked this one. I can imagine it being true for everyone that we are suspended in time. Awesome poem.
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Thank you so much. Thanks for taking the time to comment.
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excellent expression
You tell of the quiet time between awake and asleep so magically in your poem. Sometimes I am lucky enough to go to this wonderful realm.
Good luck in the contests!!
Jeannette
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where you can feel fairy tickles
and listen to angels whisper
Wow. Such a lovely write in so few words. Great descriptions.
I love the setting of this write, thanks for entering and good luck. -
Awesome:
'a tempo of breath becomes
the doorway to secrets told'
I have experienced insights at this special time. We probably have a lot of them that are quickly forgotten as sleep takes over. It is a time when we are switching from awake-mind to dreaming-mind ... or perhaps vica versa.
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Thank you for taking the time to comment, and yes...I think you are correct.
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...felt a shiver
I do know that moment in time..i often find my most magical dreams and ispirations there...you have written it so real,described for me perfectly..i have goosebumps as i have been there...you are amazing... -
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Very excited - YOU GET IT! Much appreciate your comments.
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Interesting write...Rem sleep brings alot of dream activity.. Well expressed...Keep penning!
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Thank you Rose Angel. Glad you liked it.
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This was good. I liked this one. It was rather interesting and very well written. It was enjoyable too read. Keep up the amazing work. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest!
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Thanks for the comments...I appriciate it.
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wow
that niche is sacred,deara nd exclusive..it is my desire to knowas to when do you vison such endearing spaces ..they can be so realxing and mind softening that they can relax grey matter like hell.loved this poem beautiful -
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Thanks. Meditation is good for the soul.
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