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Me and My Flower

I can't see it myself.

At least, not without a mirror,
and when the truth is reflected, it comes out backwards.
Surely that is a lie?

So all I know of outside me is a lie.

But inside... Ah, inside I am a flower,
ready and willing, but withering away.
Dusted by time and wrinkled by memories,
torn by experiences and ready for more.

I am a shrivelled bud and afraid of opening myself up
to anyone but you, the sun.
Your light peeks through my clasped fingers
and pries me open.

My red centre smiles and beats life into my love.
You have awakened me,

and now I bloom.

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Sorta kinda inspired by me and be the song 'Magnolia' by The Hush Sound. Not amazing, but I think I will review.

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  • sgking123
    November 16

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    wow

    the flower inside need nourishing for it to be bloomed its good that you d declare that you are very ready to go about tending that and needsa gardner....ahemmmmm


  • moonkissedtiger
    October 10

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    You took a flower & made it you. I love that idea, that concept, you made it work. It's beautiful.

    Fave part: "Your light peeks through my clasped fingers
    and pries me open.

    My red centre smiles and beats life into my love.
    You have awakened me,

    and now I bloom."

  • Baldwin
    October 5

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    I'm probably just a pervert but i always take sexual imagery from "my flower" feel free to damn me i really like this, it's a beautiful metaphor and also a very true one. i love the lines:
    'Dusted by time and wrinkled by memories,
    torn by experiences and ready for more.'
    the rhythm is amazing here and the imagery of your 'red centre ... beats life into my love' is so sensuous; i see pulse, lips your body as a flourishing rose. But who will pick you? only one who knows what to look for, and how to find it

    This made me smile, Thank you x


    • Zeprina-Jaz
      October 5
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      It's not at all perverted! It's meant to symbolise beauty in all forms: spiritual, emotional and physical. I know there happens/happened to be a man who painted women's vaginas as flowers, and his work is beautiful because it combines all the aspects of sensual and natural elements. I don't think that it perverted at all! There is nature in sex, and it is a beautiful act, and all of our bodies are perfect and natural and beautiful. It all goes round in one big loop. That was kinda part of the thinking behind this... Then there was the guy that made me feel like a flower Lots and lots of muse!!
      Thanks for the clappies and the review. Excellent as always.
      x