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Trinkets

The box was torn and dusted with another year of life
as it sat on a shelf unnoticed and uncared for
and precious was it filled to bursting
with the trinkets of nostalgia.

Wearing clothes of yellowed news print
my little souvenirs shined through
with moments manifesting into dreams
that shall never wake again.

I found them in the dusk last eve-
each item sang its own accord
and seduced me with the hands of time
back to the days missed madly.

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Unpacking a new flat opens boxes of memories...

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  • La Kajira silver member
    November 15
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    Nostalgia of yesterdays really can be so bitter sweet. You display motion of a moment really well along with emotion that is very understandable. Well done


  • sgking123 gold member
    November 5
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    wow

    wisful of the days gone by so preciously granted to us all....this was a beautiful write


  • Blah Blah Blah
    October 5

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    This poem really resonates with me. Numerous times I have felt your description, the flood of bygone days is overwhelming, that''s for sure.

    I would love to read a poem about one of your trinkets, or if you cared a number, to make a nostalgic chain of memory on which to adorn your readers


    • Abbey Normal
      October 7
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      Thank you for the idea. I'm writing with a new muse now and fresh ideas are always welcomed.

      "...the flood of bygone days is overwhelming"

      Yes, overwhelmed to tears actually. This is a rather new experience for me. I never really had the chance to save anything from significant points in my life. Now that I've experienced it I've learned that a visual aid of memories is a very powerful thing.

      Thanks for reading.


  • george the 23rd
    October 5

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    You kill me with nostalgia. I definitely understand the sentiment you were going after. This is perfect. Concise, but packing enough ache and life to fill an entire page if you were to have gone that route. My only criticism, and it is entirely mild, is that on stanza 2, I would've went "clothing" perhaps, instead of "clothes." But that's me. I look forward to reading more in the future.

    • Abbey Normal
      October 7
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      I have writers block (again). If it weren't for that I probably could have taken this piece further. I wanted to. The words just weren't in me.

      Thanks for the advice and for taking time to read this piece. I just might take a closer look at this one when the block lifts.


  • ryebus
    October 5

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    Nice work, very pertinent. I'd take the periods (full stops) out though.

    • Abbey Normal
      October 5
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      Thank you for reading. I've been working on flow lately... don't want any "full stops" if it interrupts the flow of this piece.

      Thanks for the advice. I appreciate it.

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