A phantom messenger lingers in the doorway.
The radiant silhouette of an angelic man,
Humming a morbid lullaby to add to my despair.
He's Gone... He's Gone... He's Gone.
The melodies forcing me into oblivion
His midnight departure is the catalyst
sparking my return to a malevolent existence...
My heart is once again covered in asphalt
I am protected. He can no longer inspire pain.
I am full of euphoria, a perfect harmony of emotions.
Friends are mystified by my spontaneous emergence,
I have blossomed into happiness, or have I?
My acting is flawless, yet it's all superficial.
My soul has been corrupt from the start.
Fireflies dance all around me as the larvae consume my insides
I need you to stimulate my mind... once last time...
Chained as a slave to my own hesitation,
I waited too long to react, and it cost me dearly.
A prisoner to regret, anxiety, nostalgia...
I could get lost in the memory of you.
My brain is decrepit. I am weak.
Carry on and desecrate everything we built.
I shall carry on with my mask of smiles
until you come home again.
Author notes
Contest #1: I used the title option as well as the word bank, along with http://lady-symphonia.deviantart.com/art/Prison-of-a-Dream-135031458 
Contest #2: This was written about the night my boyfriend moved out in the middle of the night. It was one of the most horrible nights of my life.
A contest entry
- Prompts for All by quietheather.
750 points, ended October 10, 25 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this is so good i can feel the pain in this poem and i can feel the hopelessness. also i can feel that the writer is very lonly and that they wish that the were with that person again.
"Chained as a slave to my own hesitation,
I waited too long to react, and it cost me dearly.
A prisoner to regret, anxiety, nostalgia...
I could get lost in the memory of you."
these were me favorite lines
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very nice! Sorry you had to go through that though. Sounds like it was pretty upsetting but at least you got this great poem out of it.
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Wow I can say, this was a very interesting poem to read. Especially with the dark vibes i'm getting from it, congrats on winning the contest it was WELL deserved.
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Really well written - the fourth stanza stood out for me.
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In the first stanza I like the repitition on the last line.
In stanza three I like that you ask a question after that statement in the last line: or have I?
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Amazing
This piece is very well written. I love the flow from one stanza to the next and the pictures the words portray.
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First off, I want to say congrats for winning the contest. This poem was definitely deserving of this trophy. I loved the word choice...even the words we didn't require you to use. I loved the fourth stanza. Simply amazing how you make it at first seem as if everything's going great...then the sudden decline. Great job and congrats again. I wish you luck in the future.
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Thank you so much!!!! I truly enjoy word banks because it pushes me to write with a more expansive vocabulary, and truly express what I am feeling. Thank you again for the wonderful feedback.
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