Do you remember how you felt that day
I felt even worse
When I left and drove away
it was in a hearse
For it was the death of me
to have to break your heart
But the evil inside of me
is what keeps us apart
I'm not looking for forgiveness
I want you to know
I didn't mean to suppress
feelings that you show
I just can't escape the memory
of how you looked that day
This sickness that's inside of me
I didn't want to give away
I loved you way too much
then to let you share my pain
Torn between your loving touch
the sunshine and the rain
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The last line in the first and fourth stanzas sounds a little forced, but overall, very good capturing the desperateness I was hoping to be portrayed. Thanks!
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Lol I left two comments, that's funny...Sorry!
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Fantastic write. This has so many deep elements to it which I think most people can relate to at least one of them. It did not feel quite complete. Maybe i just wanted it to go on forever, but I thought it ended too abruptly without a proper close.
Great work though. And thanks for sharing.
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It is never a good feeling to be hurt or to hurt someone.
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Wow, that fits SOOO well! You really captured what I wanted to say! Great Write!!
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