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No Reason For That

There's no reason to be jealous of me, a 16-year-old girl with over-protective parents.
    I do what's expected of me:
          I go where I'm expected to go,
          I do what I'm expected to do,
          I say what I'm expected to say.
              Nothing more.
    I don't break the rules,
    I don't test the boundaries.
    I just sit by,
          Idoly twiddling my thumbs,
          and biting my tongue.
          Waiting for the day when I can finally unleash 18 years worth of pent up anger and rage. . .
    And no one can do a thing about it.

Author notes

This is a different way of writing poetry for me. I hope the format didn't make it hard to read or anything. Please let me know if it did.

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  • writeonhorses
    October 4

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    actually i think the format made it more interesting. the best thing aout this poem is i could definately relate. except im only 14...lol

    suggestions to make it better:

    Waiting for the day when I can finally unleash 18 years worth of pent up anger and rage. . .
    (i dont think you need both anger and rage. maybe just one would be enough)

    i loved the ending, it was the best part of the poem but i think it would have more impact/strength if you ended it with just a . instead of ...