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Never Ever Fits

They tell me I need an education,
They say I must enjoy life....
and that I must feel free,
They say I should be myself...
and not let anyone bring me down,

But what they don't tell me is.....
who I'm supposed to be,

Since I Left school,
I tried all things,
But they were never good,
They say I can do whatever I like,
But everything I do...
never seems to be right,

Just tell me...
What really is a miss?
Where am I going wrong?
and why nothing I seem to do...
never ever fits,

Yes, I know I'm still young,
I'm still trying to find my way,
I'm so tired of speaking these words...
and not believe a word I say,

Yes, I'm so tired of trying,
But I know that is not enough,
If I really want to be something,
I have keep trying to do some good,

Just tell me..
what really is a miss?
Where am I going wrong?
and why nothing I seem to do...
never ever fits,






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  • Perfect Asymmetry
    October 17

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    So many f us can relate to this poem. It's very powerful, speaks of the truth.
    Bravo!
    Nela


  • fatizeh
    October 6

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    i think this piece is really cute...loved the style...n questions..great job

  • deedee 23
    October 4
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    so sad,simple but good,so sad when you find every thing never ever fits !!! you expressed it profesionally indeed great job !!

    • freddiepoe
      October 5
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      Thank you deedee. You are very kind I thought I could of made it a bit better, but I am perfectionist and never know when to stop! Lol

      and your poem was better!!
      But thanks for your encouragement and lovely words

      • deedee 23
        October 5
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        about makin it better,i think it's really good an needin to be improvin,but if you had an idea to add,do it ,an dnt forget to let me know an read it !!

      • deedee 23
        October 5
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        lol!!you are so welcome freddi !!i hope readin a new poem by you very soon,glad meeting ya here !!

        • freddiepoe
          October 6
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          Well I love the first verse. I wasn't sure if I should have made the poem around that instead of 'never ever fits' verse. If that makes sense :S

          You would be the first to know if I changed it deedee! I'm glad I met you here too

          • deedee 23
            October 7

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            mmm,i agree with you,your 1st verse is so good,but i loved the last more ,i think this poem is good as it is,an neednot any new thing....but you promised with any little change, you will inform!!

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