Its not about your job
your money your god
take a little note
i'm saving you time
Love's a waste of life
and you can never be happy.
Go ahead you'll try
Forget,
like everyone else
but me,
i'll take the easy way out
done trying
praying more the meaningless
to the invisible, deaf
Go on
worship your green gods
wait for nothing
when you're done
you'll find me here
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R o y F l y n n
Just some thoughts right now, about whats not worth fighting for..Life
A contest entry
- “We Are What We Repeatedly Do” by SheWasPreternatural.
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what are your thoughts? Does it flow okay?
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A wise man, named Solomon, once said that everything is meaningless...
(There's more to it, but would detract from what I'm saying.)
You've expressed in these words the sum of life, as many see it.
Nicely done,
~ Tim
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I'm sorry this is your current mental status, but I did truly enjoy this... even as low as it went. The raw, unresricted emotion of this piece was flawless and creatively executed, well done.
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I thought it was more of a Money's not worth fighting for - not life, because when you get to the end, it seemed like you were saying, I'll be here for you - what's important - not materialistic things.
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i really appreciate your take on this piece., i honestly have not looked at it like that. The way i thought of it when i wrote it was, all of life is meaningless, every aspect. Orignally i was my thought was to add the idea that i was already dead. But i took it out to leave not so cliche and dumb. But to be more powerful so everyone can interpret it.
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Damn I'm loving the lyrical rhythm your poetry has. Keep it coming
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It is a good poem ...
on a very real topic. My philosophy about life is: Enjoy all good things given to you, mourn your losses, then: grow.
Thank you for reading my work. I truly appreciate it.
Love
Myra
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When one is stuck in a rut, held hostage by the powers that be, when the ice-cream melts before you can take your first lick, everything around you will seem to be falling apart. Yet one can beat that which holds one down by becoming the one in control. Thus life is given meaning, but unfortunately most will never have that power, that control, so follow like sheep to slaughter they will. There the life will seem futile, worthless in the eyes of those suffering the same torment over and over again. As you see it is very thought provoking. Thanks for sharing.
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