Floating
on my
internet chair,
cushioned
to all
but the
realities
of life,
hurting
once again
to the
limits
of my
endurance
because
my honesty,
in innocence,
frightened
yet another
one
away.
Pain
floats
with me
as I sit
here,
feeling like
glances of
torchlight
on my
innards ,
burn my heart
with its
heat.
No use
crying
for what ,
it seems,
will never
be.
Too many
tears now
to shed
safely.
The chair
is weighed
down,
no spring
left in it,
like me,
leaden,
as rejection
sinks me
more.
Rigid,
dispersion
gone,
as the pain
centres.
How to
replace it?
This easy
chair
that held
me
so long
in its'
comfortable
cushions
and bounced
me
back
as life
crushed
my values.
Holding me
together
as misery
rested harshly
on my
shoulders,
cosseting me
as yet
another
dream
vanished.
This
bloody awful
chair,
my friend,
my liberty.
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Written April 8th, 2004
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very nice
This
"bloody awful
chair,
my friend,
my liberty" Oh! such a beautiful chair you possess dear gingerhoney! I feel like sitting in your chiar for a while and gain the experience of entire life at once!LOL. Really very interesting piece of poem! You love so much an inanimate object and I happily visualise how best you love the person in your heart! Take care. -
i enjoyed this poem, thought it was well written and the imagery was rather good. showing the good and bad sides of escapism, great read. well done
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OK this poem is a LONG stretch. HaHa get it. Ok maybe its just me. I'm kiddin. I'm trying to find the right words. They are there but hiding and won't come out. lol. I wanna get this right. It's like we hold onto something for so long and lean against it. Then our bubble gets busted and we are stuck not knowing what to do. At least this is what I got from it whether I'm right thats is another question. lol. Good piece hun. I really liked this one. Lots of love, ~maryj~
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Glad you liked it Billbard. It means a lot to me to have you comment favourably on my poem , since I am a real fan of your exquisite work.
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A very clever and crsative form you have used to present your words.You made it a lot easier for my old eyes to read it and my old brain to digest it in small bites.Well done.
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Glad you enjoyed it Ann, You did get the message in this piece yes. Thank you for commenting.
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our chair lets us take a long peep into unreality. it becomes reality to us. and can hurt us in as many ways as true reality can. where we bare our souls only to be once more rejected again. yes that chair is our liberator and friend.
i dont know. maybe i am waffling. but that it what i took from it.
I enjoyed the write very much
Ann
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Not all poetry is evryone's cup of tea suicidaldreams05. Thanks for commenting anyway.
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Thank you for your kind comments on my poem SaLwEiGG, I appreciate it.
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Of course, this poem wasnt about the chair at all but it was a great and unique metaphor. The format of it was very different too and I love reading new things. Great job! Thanks for commenting on my piece. Keep writing!
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You are very kind playcrackthesky in your comments and I am glad you liked it and I appreciate your comments, thank you.
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this is definitely something. very staccato, i like that. there's a really nice flow to it. I've read it three times already and I adore the details. the last five lines stole my heart away. such beauty, that.
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Thank you for commenting so favourably on this piece Glitch. I appreciate it.
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this is really good, it not only keeps the readers interest but the reader sinks into it more and more as they read. the presentation in a column works oddly well and gives the poem a swift moving momentum. great how you managed to use the chair so well in the write, with it becoming your companion and your vessel. the ending is very characterful and loved the 'bloody chair' comment, it gives the poem a quirky loving ending to it.
thanks for the read =)
glitch -
Glad you enjoyed it, and ty for being kind in your comments.
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Good piece, I have never actually fully read a poem in this style before and I must say, I was impressed. After a while it started seeming a bit too long for my liking, but I READ THE WHOLE THING ANYWAY! Definently can relate, as some of us computer nerds sit here on our chairs all day and find this poem very near and dear to our hearts.
I also liked the paradox you used about the chair although I didn't quite get the crying background as the poem didn't strike me as particularly sad....
Much Luv,
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dude my chair, is wood and there is no cushion, that might be why my butt hurts so damn much, i dunno you figure it out.
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your comments made me smile chasingtheday, so mission accomplished ! lol
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chair to chair, cheer up, i think there's some cushions somewhere, just let me look.
dum de dum de duuuuum
oops, i must of ate them
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A very well presented piece. There are feelings of rejection here & a touch of self pity too. The life that has been lived on that well worn chair is over, the chair needs replacing. It's time to stand up, hold your head high & grab a new life. I liked this write. Thankyou for commenting on my write "Abuse", your comments are appreciated. La x
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Thank you for commenting on this wmike145. I appreciate it.
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I read this twice. The first read through I almost seemed to miss it all. Then it kind of smacked me in the face so I read it again. I suppose this poem could be interpreted a number of ways, so I like the fact that some of the statements are put in a general way. Excellent.
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It's a love hate thing with the chair, and one of the reasons I made the poem a bit stattacco I suppose. While the chair is comfortable, the stuff that happens to one in it is not. Thanks for the honest critique though, much appreciated.
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WHoooo my gosh. I'm all depressed now. This hits kinda close to home since we're all net surfers here...the net i guess is kind of an escape from reality and a feel good tool, entertainment too. It was all hunky dory up untill now. Kind of an eye-opener I guess. Great poem though. Only thing I'd change is the line length, ver abrubt and it doesn't need to be that way since you're talking about comfort, short lines aren't comforting. Just a bit of advice.
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Thank you so much for taking the time to comment on my poem, I really appreciate it and agree with your sentiments.
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In the world of internet where perdators and prey mingle and everyone can be who they choose to be, matters become even more complicated often than in real everyday life. Being honest, making yourself vulnerable in many respects can be a dangerous choice in any environment. But only among hunters who are too ignorant to lose their arrogance and mistake honesty for a weakness. Your words gave something to ponder on - why this virtual world is often so messed up and beyond that to see some similarities with the real world which is perhaps messed up even more. Thanks for creating and sharing. Take care,
Rage -
Thank you so much for your kind words and comments Richard. I really appreciate it.
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Classy poem
I, for one, love the style of the broken line. The emphasis placed on word or phrase enhanced by the line is an graceful thing. Your poem is lovely and flowing, elegant and gentle. The exploration within the content is admirable and found myself adjusting position in my own chair, wondering how it would be to be tied \so| to a chair and yet it being my only means of liberty. Wonderful poem and i thank you allowing me the honor of commenting on it. Blessings and best wishes ~richard
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Thank you very much Beck for your kind words and comments. I really appreciate it.
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this is great!! Really well writeen and I love the format of few words per line - it gives the piece a wonderful flow. I agree with comments above - there is a strong feeling of rejection in this piece although no explanation of this. All in all I really enjoyed this piece, I am out of applause but oh well will give you some anyway so along with my praise you have my applause and, of course, a smile..
Beck
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You make a lot of sense Bohb, I agree with you wholeheartedly on the subject of honesty and pain, that is no loss. I think the pain initially comes into what you thought you had, and not what was really there. It rarely lasts. Ultimately the realisation hits that it is their loss and you get over it.
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Yah...Chairs and Fears
If honesty frightens one away, then where is the pain generated? From a desire to be loved from one who can't take the brunt of your fully revealed self? Nay...tis no loss at all.
And we all have our chairs that cushion us from harsh reality and support us as we dwell in dreams, wired into the great web that deceives and beguiles.
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Thank you Travisattva for your positive comments on my poem, I appreciate it.
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A couple descriptive phrases caught my attention in this write like, "pain floats" and "misery rested". Some good words in here friend. Nice write.
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Your comment made me smile, thank you NaughtyGrlRed.
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hmmm, drifting to another time come to the other side of life
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Thank you NightChilde, I appreciate your kind comments.
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It has been all too true for me BillS2, but I never let anything get me down.... There are too many wonderful things in life to concentrate on. Thank you for your very kind comments, they mean a lot to me.
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Huh... This is different, the style makes it sorta hard to read... I enjoyed it though, quite a bit!
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Excellent
Hi Gingerandhoney:
This is such a wonderful write to be so sad. The feeling of rejection comes through so loudly that it is hard to concentrate on anything else. I guess the best way to describe this write is an elegantly sad poem. I don't want to confuse the fact there is hurt throughout, but the way it is presented is elegant, it flows so that the sting is not as noticable. I have not seen that many poems written in this manner and find it interesting. Thanks for sharing this write and I can only hope it is not of true life for you, but an example for others. Bill -
Thank you NJSem for your positive comments, I appreciate it.
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Just for you Shasta.
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lovely, exciting words , good visuals , I see your chair , perhaps a brother to mine , the one that comforts me so well as I sit in it ..The only suggestion I could give , would be to , perhaps center the poem....okay so I want you to do it just for me...I have no peripheral vision , so it is easier to read centered LOL
write on..I will read
shastadaisey123 -
I suppose honesty is one of my traits, for my sins, though not everyone likes it. I dont intend to change just because of that, for I feel to do that would be to deny who I am ultimately.
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leaves much to think about
Powerful! Insightful! Sad! You reach many emotions here. Nice Job -
Not your usual write? i still have to read more of yours but I like this one. It is so honest so heartbreakingly viciously (in a way) honest. so no holds barred kind of honest. it is a raw open would exhibited in all its aching agony. I am off to read another
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Thank you so much Steph for being so kind in your comments. I appreciate it.
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This is so awesome, and so sad. And I know everyone on AP probably can relate. When we have those awful days, you know well what I tend to do is just write, and then come on the computer, put my poem on and comment. I'm sure if we all look in the 'options' n see how many hours we've been on this site, we'll probably amaze ourselves. It sounds like, you've had many dreadful days, and the 'chair' is getting worn...or something, I may not know because I don't sit at a chair, when I'm on the computer, I sit on an exercise ball
but yeah...a very unique write as 'xsiLeNceD sOuLx' said, love reading kinds that I haven't really read similar, juss awesome. Great write, keep it up, and take care.
Steph
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Thank you for your kind comments xsiLeNceD sOuLx. This is not my usual type of piece. I dont usually even like poems of this ilk but it came from someplace so I let it out. No accounting for what we let out sometimes lol.
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wow!
wow...my chair is starting to feel like yours...*sniff* its so sad...! but i love how you used shirt lines, it was very interesting, its very unique! i also love how you use so many adjectives to really describe everything...i could almost feel mylsef starting to sink in my chair! lol! awesome job!
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Thank you Galfalfa for being encouraging as always. I appreciate it. And yes, my chair and I have done a few miles....
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very creative!
Sounds like your chair and you have been through a lot! It's not easy to replace such loyalty and devotion! Well written as per your norm and a very creative structure! Enjoyed this one!
Keep writing!
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Thank you for commenting lisargh. Life is not always easy I suppose, but mostly we get over it.
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wow this is fantastic, so very sad
Floating
on my
internet chair,
cushioned
to all
but the
realities
of life,
hurting
once again
to the
limits
of my
endurance
because
my honesty,
in innocence,
frightened
yet another
one
away.
i really related to this verse especially the last line... thanks for sharing it was fantastic !! -
Thank you anark21. Some 21st century experiences are just universal.
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excellent
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Glad you could identify, bridgetjanejone, well not really in one sense, I wouldnt' wish it on anyone but you know what I mean.......
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excellent
So love this one. So understand it.
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