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Green Patina

Mid late October, first cool spell
Isolation of layers, shivers
Winds from the north squeezing fits of rain
Stealing secrets with my hat
Ancient wool fedora
Once brown, now mostly green patina
The new color of my eyes
My father's eyes compromised in resurrection
With back of mind longing
Hat chased into Sweet Olive glowing

I bury my face in the blossoms
Gulping, savoring, nuzzling aroma
Woodsmoke teasing edible sweetness
Wet, lush, shiny green leaves
blushing in celebration

Neighborhood decorated for Halloween
Arched black cats, hay bales, pumpkins
Skeletons and ghosts hanging in trees
Cobwebs of loss, silent faux tombstones

Shake off the rain , unwrap
Tea and cake so rarely offered
Leftover from birthday party
Contented client on planted patio
Safe from sheets of Loblolly dripping
Comfort of a relative stranger
For hooks in heart
Memories I promised to forget
But I break my promises
To myself

Author notes

Sweet Olive, or Tea Olive
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  • strongerthanever
    November 15

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    Love it!

    You are so talented. I love you, Ben. You are a wonderful man. Hmm, and handsome too! Thank you for being you. Memories are a wonderful thing.


  • Camille Morin gold member
    October 21

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    This piece allowed me a glimpse of life through your eyes, how rich and full it is, the sweet memories as well as the sad. This is one of my favorites of all your poems.

    Camille


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 15

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    sometimes memories are hard to forget, obviously..lol, also, promises we make to ourselves are sometimes the easiest that are broken. i really like this - it was different. thanks for entering.


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 12

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    Good writing on this page, Scribe...but the background was a bit too frivolous for such remarkable words, in my humble opinion. Good luck in the contest.



    • parenchma
      October 13
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      I was trying to pick up halloween costume thingy. Made it the full moon instead. I like better. You?


  • myrataal silver member
    October 4

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    Beautiful and visual.

    Something which I came to expect of your poetry: tactile and rich in sound and in metaphor, gathering memories as gifts to share.

    Love
    Myra


  • just mercedes gold member
    October 3

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    I love this stanza -

    I bury my face in the blossoms
    Gulping, savoring, nuzzling aroma
    Woodsmoke teasing edible sweetness
    Wet, lush, shiny green leaves
    blushing in celebration

    great response to the prompt.

    Best of luck in the contest.

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